Comments : Gone

  • 16 years ago

    by divine divinity

    Really great poem, so sweet and lovely at the start and the end is so sad and sudden. really well written, great idea you had here, great expression.

  • 16 years ago

    by cale

    Awww another A+, aish lol wow you're like that famous poet dude in the making =]

  • 15 years ago

    by CareBear

    Loved it <33

  • 15 years ago

    by Isabella

    A wonderfully sad poem.

    I think that the best part, is the last stanza, because it shows the feeligs of betrayel in a superb way

  • 15 years ago

    by El

    So sad
    But a great poem
    Well written and again good rhyming

  • 14 years ago

    by xX the left behind Xx

    Ahh..what can i say? again, wonderful write!
    i liked how everything was portrayed as happy and near-perfect at the beginning and then was suddenly twisted into something sad at the end. the rhyming was great and once again, didn't seem forced at all. the whole poem flowed great and overall, it was a good poem to show just what happens when people break promises.

    5/5 from me! :D

  • 14 years ago

    by xXHunnyGurlXx

    This poem had such a sad story to it,
    It was the lovely kind of sad. But i really great poem.

    One little thing tho.
    'kissed me lightly on the forehead'

    I think this line wud flow a little better if you rote..
    'kissed me lightly on the head'

    But just my thoughts tho,

    Other then that little flow mishap, i wud rate this poem 4/5.

    Excellent work!
    *Hunny*