I love you too. This is a great poem i love it, especially because it was about me:)! You gave me some of your secrets too, like you feel completly safe in my arms. I like and im glad that you do though. I liked how you talked about my onyx eyes too. Engaging eh?!. I love you so much....NOW AND FOREVER will I too.

You express your love so beautifully!
I'm sure you guy will love it. :)
it is a very visual poem, and it creates such beautiful images.
Very, well done.
You wonderful, wonderful writer.
Kat x

Paula,this is great, considering your many other attempts at a poem of Jake. ;) Great imagery too.Hope you continue trying to write more poems about him because most of them turn out beautifully.
A 5/5 from Rado. =)

This is such a sweet poem. It really shows your love for this boy. Your descriptions and vocab created beautiful imagery.
You said that there are better poems expressing love out there, but none that mean as much as what you write yourself. I think this was a beautiful poem. I'm sure he loved it. Well done.

Tammie

I find it really sweet, good job. I bet Jake love this piece, anyway flow was smooth, I really love this line.

I see a love that could outshine a thousand star's.
^^ I find it really powerful.

5/5!

WOW. That was just beautful. The language was captivating and the whole poem made me smile. This was very sweet and I could truly feel the love you have for this boy. Well done, a *5/5* for sure.

This piece expressed raw emotion which is nice to see afterall thats where most of our inspirations come from.

Great poem with a great structure and meaning
wot more can one want

5/5

Gary.

GREAT WORK.
AFTER READING THAT POEM JAKE MUST HAVE FALLEN DEEPER IN YOUR LOVE.

please dont forget to RRC my pems
poem1:reason
poem2:deaf dumb blind

REGARDS
MILESTONE

5/5 FROM MY SIDE

A really neat express of emotions. The metaphors were great, good rhyming most of the time and structure was also good. 5/5

My will to float into the sky,
and caress the shimmering diamonds.
Matches my intense longing,
to run my finger's through your hair.
^this was just soo sweet.
i loved this poem so much cause not only does it flow and is a beautiful love poem, it really describes love, and the feelings of it.
5/5
gaby

This was a good poem, although there was a couple of grammar errors, and the poem words didn't fit together that much. It's all right though. 3/5

<mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

Just simply lovely 5/5

Well , veryt very nice expressions , i can tell you i read it more then 2 times, i would encourage you thought to embed a good rhyme in it it will impact more !!

My will to float into the sky,
and caress the shimmering diamonds.
Matches my intense longing,
to run my finger's through your hair.
^This stanza made absolute no sense.

sturdy oak
^This didn't make any sense either because an oak is the most weakes kind of tree there is.

Okay honestly the poem is a mess. I couldn't understand this poem at all. The flow was really hard to catch on too. Could really use work. But don't give up i just think you need to go over this poem and instead of trying to use enhancing words so much use them everynow and then mixing it with basic words. You seem to try too hard to make it enhance other than make sense. Don't feel bad I've done this so many times, but don't feel bad or take it personally I'm only trying to help you out for the near future. :)
<3tay
4/5