Simply love'd this poem! Strong feelings behind it i can see, flowed naturally! keep up the great work!!

I really like your writing, keep it up.

Very good :)

I liked the feeling of this poem, if that makes any sense.

"Not one happy moment
no security equals torment
memories are so vague
this house is just a plague."

This was probably my favorite part. Paints an image with strong rhyme and flow work.

I just simply love your work!!

The idea is very interesting, and unique, and you expressed emotions through descriptions in a good way. I juts don't like rhymes, they seem forced and typical. All in all, nice job!

I'd Like this poem, I mean one of the poems of yours i have great appreciated. Nyc!1

Very nice very nice o:

I think this is a good poem that can be made even better. Verses 2 and 5 are good - You seem to be forcing and stretching for rhymes in the other verses. My suggestion is to not be concerned about rhyming as much. But I like the personification of a house needing to have a home as much as a person. Also puts me in mind of the movie "The Haunting" - the original one, not the remake!

Awesome writing man! keep it up!

Lol, I feel like that about my house, although its where I live, it never has felt like home... nowhere does recently.
nice job!
5/5 because I can relate.

Very good poem
i loved it

i could feel the emotion in it
the rhyming was excelent

5/5 from me

~Shannon~

I love the poem very awesome you have great talent

Your poem flowed excellently. I have also felt this way…but its never been said how you explain it. Magnificent job keep it up. 5/5

I love your personification! Good work.

Well written and original it flowed nicely, you seem to have a lot of talent keep it up

5/5

Great write, The underlying torment of this poem was very clearly portrayed.5/5

Cory

Wow. That was wow. I think I can still feel the emotion reallying off the screen. Thanx

You commented mine,so im commenting yours.your alot better than me.But im the best 11 year old poet here.

Wow. this poem describes my mothers house. god. very frightening to read something i can relate to that much. scares the shit out of me. like my mother. lol.

--TheGothicAlbino