Don't leave me

That was pretty strong.
keep it up. :)

Awwww that is the most cutest and saddest poem I ever read I swear 5/5 keep it up

"Don't leave me
Because I don't want to do this
I don't like this knife
I can't get through this"

"Don't leave me
Don't you love me?
Don't you care for me?
Don't you want me?"

"Don't leave me
I won't let you!
I won't let it happen!
I won't forgive you!"

^^I was thrown off on those three stanza's because you used the same words to rhyme at the end of each stanza.

I didn't like the amount of fillers you used in this, it seemed like the entire poem consisted of "I, me, you, and, the." and I thought it terribly disrupted the flow.

I liked the last line, I thought it was very moving and powerful, and I liked how this was somewhat in the format of a letter.

Try eliminating the many I's, and me's, and you'll find the flow is so much smoother.

This was a great write - very good expression of emotions (and at such a young age!!) Keep up the great work. -Tara

Not this i absolutely loved, you could
feel the emotion coming through
every word. it was amazing, yet
so sad. nicely penned piece.
def 5/5

nikki