This one didn't intrest me as much sorry

This one had much better flow than Ghost. I also liked the more darker take you had on mermaids. Great poem and I give it a 5/5. Keep up the great work.

I like the way you made me think about the mermaids. 5/5 simply because i wouldnt of been able to write a poem about mermaids this good

Imagery of this poem is fantastic. I like the idea and you really wrote it excellently. I can see picture of your words right in front of me. Powerful write, whole piece has great atmosphere. It deserves 5/5

The imagery was really good in this, far better understanding than the acrostic but of course this had more lines anmd was able to flow from your imagination.
Love Tara-Kay
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EXCELLENT! See? However, you must work on some of your punctuation. May not seem important but it is. It makes the poem look neat, clean, and professionally done. Lol.

Work on the punctuation. =^_^=

"To steal their lives,
play with their souls
These are the beauties,
With secrets untold. "

^^^ My favorite line. "with secrets untold..." Love it.

[Votes 5]

_Sam

Mermaids! aww like nice theme, i almost have forgotten that they exist, well in fairy tales. Beautiful imagery. And the theme was unique for me. Flowed all nice and had some mystery to it.
Amazing write! 5/5

Wow well it has great description and imagination.. mermaids are known for their beauty and sweet voices, because of that they seems so harmless to human but you perfectly twist the other side of it and brought up the freaky side of it. great job!! unique one..

This poem is awwesome and very descriptive. It tells a lot about the subject matter and flows poetically. Good work

Keep it up

Tc
Fsams

That was very intresting poem that i ever read in my life. what a great job .. only great writer can do that. and u r a great writet. keep it up.

Loved this alot, Such an awsome fantasy. I loved the iamgery you painted into my mind by your great descriptive word choice. The flow was spot on and it didn't seem to faulter at all. The idea behind this was interesting. The atmosphere you created was dark and eerie but at the same time calm and piece. Well done on this gorgeous write. ~Mel

I LOVE ITTTTTTTTTTTT.
Oh my gosh, you have no idea.
it's like perfection. in words.
second poem i've said that about today.
lol.
but i'm completely honest.

no changes, darling.
none whatsoever.

This was very good just like the rest of your poems your very talented

I like how you gave something seen as relatively peaceful an evil persona, never thought of mermaids like that..great word choice in this one, keep it up!

So filled with emotions and thoughts. I like this poem. If improved, would be great. Keep it up.

This is an excellent piece
5.5
i love your descriptive language. It is very strong in this particular poem.

This was better but it still lacked some fundemental mythology that you could have used. I would doi some research on Mermaids and then redo this poem but it was good for starters. Plot1211