Winding down

by Christina Gomes   Sep 30, 2007


Press rewind, lets go back
thoughts tumbling here
your mind i'll hack
now we press pause
let's think this through
a blur in your eyes
what can we do?
hurry! faster!
we're almost gone
the blinds are closing
baby, we've hit dawn
so you see your choices
what's your decision?
cause it's clear to me
i know my vision.

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  • 12 years ago

    by umbra

    I like the poem. The rhythym has you moving along at a quick pace and the emotions excite, which I assume is exactly what you wanted. Good job. 5/5.

  • 12 years ago

    by ether

    Filler words like "baby" don't work in poetry unless they're used with extreme sarcasm.
    Other than that, this is good. The hurry! faster! seems a little sudden and stops the flow. But eh, still a great poem. 5/5.

    jess ~