Winding down

I like the poem. The rhythym has you moving along at a quick pace and the emotions excite, which I assume is exactly what you wanted. Good job. 5/5.

Filler words like "baby" don't work in poetry unless they're used with extreme sarcasm.
Other than that, this is good. The hurry! faster! seems a little sudden and stops the flow. But eh, still a great poem. 5/5.

jess ~