I agree with most of the Comments here when it comes to the criticisms. Typing out words is a good thing to do. Also making the actual concepts of the poems clearer would help a lot. I do like this poem, though, and I can't wait to read the next one.

Brill

Loved the emotion you put into it! :-)

Danielle
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Very good the only thing I'd really harp on is to get your stanzas equalled out but it was still a very good poem nice work
5/5

I like that.
I just think that some of the stanzas could be put together, instead of the two lined ones. but overall good job

Wow...great poem :) go on

I liked it but it was hard to tell wat u wanted things to ryhme with wat... u gta keep things goin in one steady motion... b ut other then that it was good.