Weird...i dunno why..i kinda liked it..
maybe cause of its short length...and full of meaning...
people usually need more space to convey the message they need to..=P
i particularly liked this part
"Hope
holds hard at heart.

Once shattered,
they break as bones."

anyways...a definite 5/5 from me..nice work..

Gastlee,
Like Kakashi, I was kinda confused by this poem. I like your others pices more, but nonetheless, you never lack a great vocabulary in your poems! I particularly liked these lines:

Statements stir
stiff as steel.

They show so much power in few words ^_^
This was a pleasure to read, so keep it up and great job, 5/5!

With all due respect,
Hatori

Very powerful in ur words, I kinda liked it, weird...but i liked it! ok,now im gonna be waiting on my three comments

Good imagery and figurative language here. good poemmm :)

by the way, it's good to be back haha. we'll see if I can keep up with writing.

Excellent!

Simple words turn to a message then to great piece! Very descriptive piece!

keep it up!

Short, but powerful. nice choice of words i really enjoyed this one becuz its so well put together in an amazing way. 5/5

The style was unique, and diffrent. Diffrent is always good, the word choice was excellent, try steppin it up a bit with your vocab, to make it more powerful. theh emtion was deep, and the imagery was brillant. keep up the good work 5/5

I have honestly never seen a poem like this, when i first saw it i was doubtful but when i read it i enjoyed it. good job

your servant:
atticus

So powerful the way you set it out, it was excellent, well done. i have missed reading your very insightful poems...

5/5 David

Very intense and deep. Word choices are great.
Take care Cindy

I like this one from you......it has some very deep meaning if I read it correctly....

Vows
voice solemn sound.

Commitment
comes with compact.

^ Awesome lines......all the best, Debbie

Slightly different approach, which i like alot...
big fan of diversity in writing....i loved the way you wrote it, the message was a little lost to me any way...but i still thouroughly enjoyed it....good job

Short and very powerful. The flow was quite beautiful. Another orginal and wonderful write. 5/5

marcella