Sweet 5/5

Sweet poem

I love your rhyme scheeme. Everything went so well together. It is cute to=)

Sweet

Lols.
this is cute
everything ryhmed
though in some parts you kinda forced it in
and the beginnging,

"One day at night"

im just a little confused.
how can it be day, but at the same time night ?
lols

over all it was nice.

i give you 5/5

Dear cindy lala. . My lady, in this poem, shone when appeared at night to light my whole world :)

Thnx 2u all 4ur nice comments :)

Beautifully written love poem, interesting rhyme=) loved it...5/5...Melody...=)

U got a good talent! This is poem is so sweetttt!

This poem is loving and whimsical and full of magic. I enjoyed it very much , he was nicely written and is just a feel good poem
thank you for sharing

Omg! This is so beautiful!

I so Love it! =]

Wow!! this ones nice!

Aw that is sweet, yes more people in the world should believe in love at first sight :)
I liked your rhyming scheme it was different and simple.
Really nice.
5/5 for sure :)

Great poem. i love it.

This is so beautiful.. really it is.
wow.. rhyming is your thing isnt it? haha.
this poem is gorgeous..
keep writing.. its awesome :)

Heey great poem!! i loved the imagry... like this...
"I could move neither left nor right

And life, at once, became loose and tight"

...that contrast is the EXACT feeling that happens when sparks fly!! awsome!! 5/5!

Hi,i love the rhyming scheme,i have been trying to write a poem like that
Well done !!
Thankyou for your comment
5/5

I can visualize my love at first sight! ;)

This is really really beautiful!
WOW!

This is truly beautiful I LOVE IT, I LOVE THIS POEM, two thumbs up!

This happen to be the best rythm poem I've ever read. Still fresh even if its half a decade old..