This is painful reading.
Not from the lack of literacy skill - you have that in abundance .. its painful as to how close to home it hits about the society we live in today. This is a beautiful piece of poetry about such a dismal state of affairs. The most damning of all of it is that it's barely even noticed now, just taken as commonplace.

To move away from the content and on to the poem. Its beautifully written, keeps your attention from start to finish. I love how the words sounded in my head. Great imagery keeps you entralled throughout.

Subject matter alone deserves a 5, coupled with the flow and style, just a perfectly penned piece of art.

Great work.
[5/5]

Very nice, i myself wrote a poem just like this recently, good format, good pacing, a good read altogether

your servant:
atticus

Wow...........Jenni, the thing that makes this poem so amazing is the truthfulness of the words. You did an incredible job on this, putting everything so nicely into perspective. This poem should be on walls everywhere.

"...that they've fel...t" << I think it would sound better as ". . . they have. . . "

"Taking anger out on their friends and mother's
Friends turning on friends, sister's on brothers"
^^ Friends = used twice. I'm not too fond of that, in this type of poem. And, the rhyme was a bit.. Well, I'm not sure. But, I didn't like that too well.

". . . Everyone guilty of that. . . " << Everyone's*

Okay, overall it was a great poem. The meaning was so honest, amazing, and great. The flow was good all except in the line with the 'Mother|Brother' rhyme, and the rhyming was good all except for that as well.

Amazing job, darling.
Keep it up.
4/5

Wow
Amazing job!
I love this poem so much because it is so true and it has a great meaning and excellent flow and word choice
It makes you think and it's not too long but not too short
I love it
5/5

That was amazing 100/10 :]

very very good

I read this piece and thought to myself how much society itself has fallen most because of the pied pipers that run it and the rats that follow their lead. i thought the words that you chose fitted the poem perfectly and brought it to life as much.

excellent piece!!

5/5.

These are my favourite types of poems. I absolutely love how you are able to open eyes and express difficulties and disfunctions in society. I sometimes find doing this hard but you seem to fly through it nice job xxx alex xxx

We all hope to live and foster a great life but sometimes the realities of life are so harsh and cruel. Sometimes it hits home with a family member or a close friend.
Very nicely expressed.

Wow! amaizn 5/5 x

Wow I really love this poem!
Keep up the good work
5/5

Eh, it's kind of a cry for attention. I dont really enjoy reading this genre of poem (although Im a bit guilty of writing them a bit myself). It screams self misery, yet is written very well.

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

Pretty good i like its point =)