I enjoyed this poem alot, as at the moment i'm not in the happiest mood and could actually feel what you were portrayed throughout this piece. One thing though you need to capitalize your "I's". For a non rhyming poem you pulled this one off quite nicely it definitly does deserve a 5/5 in my eyes. Simple yet effective. Well done. Keep up the good work. ~Mel

Very creative poem with a creative and eye catching title. I loved the word choice and it is well structured. Keep up the superb work. Its 5/5 from me :)

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I'm not a great fan of non-rhyming poetry, but this one is really quite eye catching. It's well written enough to not rely soley on a rhyme structure.

This poem sums up exactly how i felt after my most recent breakup, wishing I could change the way that things were. You've put into words the emotions that run through your head when you lose someone close.

Wonderful word choice, and great vocabulary throughout.
Overall a wonderful poem of heartbreak and wanting.
Very nice work.
~Pete.

A simple poem that comprimises a intense ambiance and a powerful setting. a lonely, painful and depressing poem.. your words flawlessly bring it all in one piece. wow! by the way i love your title, it looks so peaceful and innocent but honestly holds a vivid poem. great work..

Oh sorry what i mean is comprises... anyway. 5/5

Aww. it was awesome. i loved they way you have expressed your feelings thats was such a great poem

my dear,
you work deserve 5/5

I have a poem almost parallel to this one, very good work. it had good pacing and format. and it was very well writtern, great job

your servant:
atticus

I love how you have so much emotion.. its not the kind of poem i usually read.. but it was a great piece you have such amazing talent keep up the good work!

Excellent! Keep writing more poems like this!

It was really great. I loved how much feeling you put into this poem. Keep writing. And don't worry about that lost love... there will be more! I swear to you!
-Danielle-