Comments : Without The Rain [Rictameter]

  • 14 years ago

    by ECILA ice

    This one is smoothly and peacefully written.. so calm and short but comprises a lot of meaning and emotions. good job!! keep it up!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Pete

    I think this is a wonderful poem. This structure is a hard one to do as you need to pack everything you want to say into such a short space. I think this is a terrifically sad story, beautifully penned.

    My only qualm would be a rather stupid one and nothing to do with the actual poem .. you have misspelled interpret. Like i said .. petty.

    Nice work.
    [5/5]
    ~Pete.

  • 14 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, I love it...
    I failed in every attempt to write good Rictameter.
    Whole poem is greatly written, you picked good form and created so vivid and powerful imagery. This poem contains truly touching sadness in every line.
    Keep up!
    5/5 from me

  • 14 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    "She washed ashore
    Weeping for all she's seen"

    These lines reminded me of my cousin when she lost a love before. The poem overall was amazingly done! 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Shinobi

    Never knew such a type of poems existed before. Liked it very much, maybe will try to write a similar poem sometimes. The words and rhyme are great as usual. Keep it up 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by AlyssaBrook

    I love it!
    I really like how you taught how to write that type of poetry. DEFINITELY 5/5
    =]

  • 14 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This was quite the amazing read to tell you the truth. I loved the style, attempted this one and found it enjoyable yet difficult. To interpret this it is a hard one but beautiful. To me it seems like your talking about a mermaid being washed ashore. Just a guess though. You have me interested. Let me know if it is. Overall an amazing read. Definitly well deserving of a 5/5 ~mel

  • 14 years ago

    by awww

    A good read for me.. i liked your wording it made it easier for me to capture the image you portray.. nice job there.. even if it required the last line to have the same syllables, i liked how you repeated the first line.. it made the word "lifeless" linger in my mind..

    ~angel~

  • 14 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Wow nice style! seems u have a great imagery for writing this..aside from the style of ur work i'd love also the words that u expressing.. i think it written very well and perfect! 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Aureus Argentum

    A very well written piece, Cella. :)
    I loved the words you used, the expressive imagination. It was all just very moving. Very beautiful. 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Teria

    "Although, weep she will, until all is still"
    Both commas throws off the flow a bit. So many people think that you should put commas in just because they're required in essays and such. But, in poetry when it's read allowed you're suppose to pause for the punctuation, not much but just a tad and then continue on reading. Well, if someone has too many commas, periods, etc. Then obviously all the pausing is going to throw off the flow a bit. I'd suggest taking the second comma out, but which ever you prefer is the way to go.

    This is a nice poem. Short but well written. You have done a wonderful job expressing the emotion which in return has given you an almost flawless flow. You worded yourself perfect and overall put the piece together quite well.

  • 13 years ago

    by kelleyana

    Very meaningful Rictameter. This poem makes you think, short yet well written and touching. keep it up, kel.