Theres alot of feeling in this one, I don't know if you were going for rhyming but insted of "knowing I need you?" you could put "Your something I need" to rhyme with "me". But its still good the way it is. Keep up the good work. ~Zach

I REALLY UNDERSTAND WHAT YOUR SAYING AWESOME

Wow! This piece is so easy to relate to. It was really really good. That third stanza where he said all those things was strong and powerful. I think all people from time to time have felt the one they love has some control over them but that they aren't loved back. It's a sad situation, and something that you have to get out of. But good job on the piece and thanks for your comment!
*ME*

Nice piece .. flows well and good emotion.. feeling love and hurt something we can all relate too

It gave me goosebumps when I read it. Cause I can totally relate. I can relate to many poems, but I"ve never ment it more. Brr it just sounds like something I would write. Its everything what i'm feeling.
GRRREAT JOB. :) Sarah. x

This is really good!

U want to hear something funny.... i dont even have to read this poem, because i already kno u did a great job, and gurl your a an excellent poet to.

so 5/5

Nice. another extremely moving piece..

I like this lots

no suggestions for it

5/5 i really loved this poem it was really good, i especially liked the last part. great job. c/b
-Kelsey

Sad poem, but eventually you get through all that stuff, it just takes time, alot of time. i loved it though