Letdown

by Sorefromreality   Oct 21, 2007


You were holding me close in my bed.
I can hear your heartbeat.

-thump-
-thump-
-thump-
It beats so hard.

Your kiss lingers on my lips, you have to go soon.

I look you in the eyes...
"I Love You."
You kiss me.

"I'll never leave you," is all you say.
You kiss me and add,

"I promise."
Promises are just pretty lies tied up with ribbons though.

You said goodbye, and left.

Why won't you tell me you love me?

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  • 15 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This is really short and powerful, well done xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Alex D

    By the way, I wanted to let you know that you are the only poet with a poem in my favorite poems <3.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alex D

    I really really enjoyed the use of sonics with the sounds of the heart beat. It really gave it the extra little bit. I, also, really enjoyed this line:

    Promises are just pretty lies tied up with ribbons though.

    It's subtle and true that 99% of promises fit this description.

    Great write

    Thanks for the great comment on my latest poem.

    Alex

  • 16 years ago

    by meandhim080307

    Aww, thats so sad. i loved this, is was short, but great. great job. 5*5
    Kimberly

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica Evelyn Maxwell

    Wow i love this, specially when its put in the conversational. wow. this explains alot in a short write. i love it.
    very good write keep it up.
    5/5 :)

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