This is deep, you could make a poem out of it.
You wrote it in a good way, expressing good message.

Simple but true,,,, something worth a 2nd thought

That was great! and so true

I liked this one alot, I found it to be really deep though not poetry like prob because of the way it is set up. I think if you put this piece into stanzas it would make the poem look alot neater. Loved the deep meaning of this so Overall a 5/5 from me on this. Keep up the great work.

Not have the strength
should be
not to have the strength

couple of people of the wrong people
sounds wrong

we know to be grateful for the wonderful gift.
somethings missing here

you just foccused on the ideas and not on framing the poem
thoughts were good cos I understood what you are trying to say but in my own way

4/5 is what I can give

space it well by edititing

tc,
Roxiee

Firstly, i love the last line. And i like the message but i think it would be better if you edited and put it into stanzas. Still, great write.

YES IT IS BABE. I WILL ALWAYS GIVE U MY LUV.