Alone tonight..

by Ashley   Nov 2, 2007


Dark & scary
Feeling alone tonight
Tears start to fall
As i play my favorite song
Im in a room full of people
But yet I am the loneliest I have ever felt
I am yelling
But no one is listening
My body starts to shiver
As the music gets louder
& my heart starts to beat
The lead singer starts to scream
Jumping to the sound
Banging the drums really loud

Pain & misery
Is what its about
Ive learned to love to hate

The song starts to fade
As my vision get blurry
Im starting to sweat
The Song has ended
I have fainted
and no one cared.
<3<3<3<3
Ashley
i could not think of an ending. so someone please help me. and comment and rate PLZ!!!

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  • 16 years ago

    by hadia

    Saaaad!
    good poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by StandStill

    Love the poem. and i would use like, after the faint part

    but nobody cared

    or something kinda like that, u no?
    but actually, i kinda like it the way it is! good job!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by justin

    Maby if you wanted to try a diff ending get the whole idea why u feel alone why u have learned to love and hate unno get some feelings in the end
    but its still good stuff.....what do u listen to punk ....screamo?

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany

    I personally think the ending is good the way it is. It's actually a really good poem. Just when you're going to say "to" don't use the number, and don't use the number in the title either.
    I've cruised around in the forums, and a lot of people avoid poems like that.
    But, this is an excellent poem =)
    Keep it up.

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