It's Your World Now

You have done an excellent job on this piece. It is hauntingly sad yet a pleasure to read. Imagery and word choices great.

I do not know this place,
Where we have come to be,
It's all so strange and distant,
Like a haunting melody.

I love the opening stanza it sets the meaning and flow for the entire piece.

I hope you find your way,
Before it's much too late,
My love is sitting in the wings,
But time will never wait.

The ending is perfect. Reminds me of the old saying. Time waits for no man.
Great job!
Take Care Cindy

Oh My do I love this poem! It has a beautiful lyrical quality that captures the reader and holds them to the end. Beautiful word usage and imagery along with impeccable flow and rhyme scheme makes this an excellent read.

"My world is somewhere out there,
So I must say goodbye,
A kiss upon your tender lips,
A tear falls from my eye."

^hauntingly sad....

"I thought I'd take you with me,
But you don't want to leave,
And now I question everything,
I ever did believe."

^this I feel speaks to everyone who has been in a relationship where over the years they drift apart.....

Awesome write....thanks for your beautiful entries in the contest....love where you took the titles! Take care, Debbie

I love the ending here, very intense and stunning, beautifully written and very powerful.

I enjoyed this, I found it to be filled wish so much emtoion throughout, and the flow was absolutely flawless.

Beautifully written.

Keep it up~ thats deep ... good for you