Crying Over You

Very touchy...in your poem detailed all your emotions in that person who left behind your relationship; how so hard and so much pain that his promised would be gone...

Forever, you promised
Forever, a lie
You promised the moon
And the stars in the sky>

>his promises under the moon...in the stars and in the sky was gone away like a cloud that only passed by...

You'd stolen my heart
Then left me alone
You were so cold
It chilled to the bone.

>oh, very beautiful in describing your feeling...i love the way you write>you'd stolen my heart..then left me alone...i can imagine how you feel when he left you alone and brought your heart away.too...so sad=(

But "I love you" found an ending
The 'us' and 'we' no more
You said you didn't mean to
But you hurt me to the core

>this part, you expressed that you still love the person even if he hurts you...the idea here, in past you was hoping that the "we" and "us" will be together forever and never be apart..but, he disappointed you...it seems, ryt? I love this part,too...very emotional...

So I guess that I'm the loser
Cause you've found someone new
But I'm still here, still all alone
Just crying over you...

>just be brave..sometimes destiny is teasing us to be strong and better person...learn from what you have experienced, life is full of challenges...don't lost hope because of that person..maybe he is not the right person for you...maybe there is somebody who really loves you and the right person for you..people just in and out into our lives...and for sure when those people go..there is a better person who will come to comfort you....life must go on..and be happy!

anyways, i like your poem...overall=)good luck and keep on writing more beautiful poem=)5/5

Thank you ^^)

Wow, this is amazing, I love it. Beautiful job :) xo

Lovee it!