Shouldn't Have Done That

I really loved this i loved all your emotions it was wonderful! Absolutly amazing...It hurts to read stuff like this but it was good and eye capturing

Anthony,

Hey babe, let me start off by saying that I think the poem here is very meaningful and vivid. It is one that many can relate to and feel the emotions pouring out from the penned soul.

This poem is good; however, I think that with a few improvements is could be great. I will go through each stanza briefly, but in the end it is only my opinion and just some food for thought.

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I needed some help
And you answered my call.
The only one of my friends
Who refused to let me fall.
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Remove the word I from the first sentence and the word And from the second line. I think that it will aloow a better flow
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Gratitude eternal,
But feeling something new.
For some odd reason,
Theres only me and you.
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In the second line remove the word But..maybe replace with Now
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Back to my house
Watching a movie, catching up.
Telling me how sad you were
The day you got dumped.
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Add a descriptive word in the last line... maybe "the sorrowful day you got dumped"
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Trying to be a comfort
But an accidental touch
Led us both somewhere
That we knew would be too much.
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Again, remove the word But from the second line
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Your lips touched mine
And I answered them back.
Not knowing why I let you
Pitch my world into the black.
^^^
Remove the word and from the second line

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Slowly clothes come off
And I can't make myself say no.
I've never done this thing before
And I want to know how far to go.
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Again... starting a sentence with the word And just seems to fog the flow slightly. I would love to see less of..and's, & but's
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In the Ecstasy of it all
I lost myself inside of you.
Now I can only wonder
What I let myself into.
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Wonderful, just wonderful.

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The rose colored glasses
I let you put onto my face
Have come off and now I'm scared
Of the truth that took their place.
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the third line.. try have come off now leaving me scared

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I know I don't have feelings for you
And I should have stopped before.
But because you have some spell on me,
You're not welcome anymore...
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Again.. the words and & but

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I know it must appear that I am nit picking, but this poem is just flowing with emotional meaning. I hope that my suggestions do not offend you.

~~Sher