Heart Crushed

by Jo Anna EL   Nov 11, 2007


I wonder if he knows
how much it hurts
too see him with her.

Has he ever felt pain,
I see him call her
name, she comes

too him filled with glee.
He doesn't know what
it's like to cry,what it is

to be sad, or feel like dying.
My poor soul has been through
much.

And now my hearts been
crushed.

Special thanks to Reproducedbyintellagence
She made the way it looks with the stanzas.

*my friends say i need to move on but i can't.
My full explanation is on a comment left on a poem written by Nicole called He has her.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    The poem is amazing.
    Great word choice, flow, emotion.
    I mean GREAT emotion. (:
    One thing, though.
    I think the way you have the stanzas could be different.

    I'll show you how I think it should be broken up:

    I wonder if he knows
    how much it hurts
    too see him with her.

    Has he ever felt pain,
    I see him call her name,
    and she comes.
    too him, filled with glee.

    He doesn't know what
    it's like to cry,what it is
    to be sad, or feel like dying.

    My poor soul has been through
    much.
    And now my hearts been
    crushed.
    ^^
    Something like that would just make it look better, and then the words that need to go together would go together.

    This is just my opinon, and I think the poem is amazing.
    And, I hope you find the strength to move on.
    I'm sure you deserve better, darling.

    5.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jo Anna EL

    Oh he does but he has her ters roll down my face