It's Sad

Hmmm... I really liked the last 3 lines but the rest didn't seem to click in for me. Bu the flw as good. But I think it could be better. Good job.

Soda E>

This did make me sad.... It made me have that rush as sadness, like the first second when your heart sinks after hearing bad news. Very interesting to read.

~*~Alex~*~

Amazing work, the stanza that really made it was the last one---Sadness sends sorrow,
but sorrow moves tomorrow,
for life is everywhere and eternal----just beautiful. keep up with the great work--tara

I absolutely admire intense rhythm of this piece, very creative poem you expressed emotions on a incredible way and created a truly captivating tone.
Well done, very original work and atmosphere in whole poem is remarkable!

Love it! I love your style of writing, i think that the shorter stanzas really help to bring the point across. 5/5