Comments : Broken Glass

  • 16 years ago

    by Loved In Hell

    Wow alot can relate but still you have your own view on things which is good i loved this write great job gabby, 5/5

    laura

  • 16 years ago

    by Kayla

    Wow, Gab... such a powerful poem! To be honest, I had no idea you could write like this with how cheerful and happy you always seem to be. I do love this poem very much! I could tell it came straight from the heart and was very deep. The emotions were so intense, I could feel them pouring out of the poem... great job! I love ya girlie, keep up the amazing job! 5/5 <3 <3 <3

    ~Kayla~

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    I consider this a "Poetic write" instead of a poem. You used your feelings and wrote them out without an actual style. Which always turns out amazing, much like this. I loved it, it was very strong and flowing with emotion! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kitten

    Great poem i loved the line "I learned that wishes don't come true" it is so true

  • 15 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    Usually I prefer stanzas, but every poem I've read by you is so captivating that I don't care that they're not in stanzas. You draw me in and make me feel all of your emotion.

    These scars, not marks of bravery, I enjoy the pain.

    ^^ I enjoy the pain...This hits home so hard for me. Those words just keep ringing in my ears. They're stuck in my head and I know they won't go away anytime soon.

    Is happiness too much to ask?

    ^^ It really seems that way doesn't it..? Happiness is too much to ask for.

    I don't even know why unhappiness clouds my eyes, because the world should be bright.

    ^^ I just have a little suggestion. I don't like the word "unhappiness" for some reason.. maybe you could change it to sorrow or something similiar?

    I'm too good at lying, and my blood leaves no trace.

    ^^ Again, I'm exactly the same way.. I don't even have to think about lying anymore. I just do it. It's so natural now. :\

    I learned that wishes don't come true.
    Life really should be kind.

    ^^ Amazing ending. It really sums everything up. *sighs* I wish wishes did come true.. that'd be great.

    Another amazing poem from Gaby!

    Keep writing!
    Cayce