My pale skin soaking in the rays of it's pure light
Only it's music reaching my ears in this dark night
Over me and under me, it's sound sinking within
Not a sound I make as I bare my teeth and grin.
Loving every heartbeat in this godforsaken world
Ignorance is bliss for some, my body slowly uncurls
Gasping for the luscious taste of red, like a lioness I run
Hate spilling out from inside me for those born into the sun.
Torn between humanity and this animal I've become
Slithering, like a million snakes, my pack waiting for some fun.
Watching, we stand silently, waiting for our cue
Hisses from black mouths, impatient for what's due
I smile at the others, for my blank eyes see it's here
Sickening almost, for the moon, our silent cheer.
Predators, creep invisibly, as we crawl into their homes
Eating to our comfort, pleasure taken from their moans
Reaching deeper, deeper, into the lifestream of our kill
Slinking, like a million snakes, not one drop our tongues do spill.
All your poems that i've read have great imagery this one included the rhyming wasnt neccisarily needed but it did add effect on some line it never took anything away from the poem but there were lines that probably could have been made better by using diffrent words that didnt neccesarliy rhyme
I read "submission" a minute ago and clicked the link to your profile and was completely astounded to find that you're 13! You're writing is so mature and so much better than a lot that is on here (don't get me wrong, there are loads of amazing poets on here but you know what I mean!) I don't mean to sound patronizing but seriously, wow!!! I find it so hard to write fantasy poetry which really annoys me because I love it! Anyways, I love the way you make this poem surround me by using phrases like "Over me and under me, it's sound sinking within." And the imagery (once again) is awesome. You really are a very talented writer! *Adds to favourites* =)