Aww that's so sad. it seems like a little soap opera in a little poem lol. great job. 5/5
-vino

Ooooh shivers, that made my spine tingle 5/5

Gosh this was intense! dark and the ending, hurtful. well described and the lifelike to it was kinda scary. hope your ok.

5/5 David

'I love you,' she said with her one last breath
'I love you too,' he said as he took it away

just love such poems...where every reader could come out with different feelings and experience. its like leaving someone of the edge of cliff and then asking them to complete the dream.

beautiful poem.

all the best and take care

Painted pastel perfection portrays priceless pain
OH MY. The alliteration in that was friggen fantastic. @$%#$^% I can't say how much I loved that. I don't see too many poets these days using alliteration expecially thoughout a whole poem and that I ADORED.

'Please don't,' she said as he cut into her beating chest
'I'm sorry, but it must be done,' he replied

Now these two lines, Grr. Loved Them! Something so simple yet they seemed to have a dark tone to them which swept over my mind whilst reading it. Can't express my love for them lines. I really can't no matter how hard I try.

I enjoyed this entire piece because of the dark atmosphere you portrayed. It was vivid and stunning though at the same time cruel and demoned like.

The last lines were simple yet effective I liked the feeling of sadistic love they portrayed.

An enjoyable read you have yet again created. Dark poetry definitly interests me and if you pull it off well you have me hooked. You did just that so well done. 5/5 ~Mel

Excuse my one mistake I made in that comment. =/

I ment

I don't see too many poets these days using alliteration expecially thoughout a whole |line| and that I ADORED.

Sorry once again.