OMG that is amazing, i love the way you describe everything and the emotion that i got from reading it was undescrible i just love this poem
its a really sad poem, that in my opinion was well put together
im so adding it to my favs
great job
5/5

Theres a great symbol of treachery through the use of a Christmas setting. Although there is no time flow, there is a sense of a beginning, middle, and end that leaves the reader with a fulfillment.

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

I love your rhyme scheme and everything is very well organized. You really know how to write, also I love your emotional thought!!! It's 5/5!!!

Really liked this poem, well written and the flow was good, good choice of words, the sadness really screamed out in the poem. beautiufl.

This is a great poem, I, as I'm sure with others, can relate to the feelings in this poem, and I think it's great you can write so well about something so strong with you only being 14. Kudos to you. Gave you a 5 as well ~_^

I couldn't stand throwing myself down,
I gave you everything you wanted.
I put you in front of all my needs,
but even so I faulted.

^ I like how you ended this stanza with " but even so I faulted ". It had so much to say in a few words!

I guess I'm searching for only an answer,
with a question I just don't even have.

^^ I like these two lines. They have so much to say inside. I loved how you ended the poem with it.

I think this poem has really a heartfelt beat to it.

I hope to hear more of your poems from you.

- TheWorldFellNUWerentThere.

Heya another sad sad sad poem
but extremely well done
made me want to call you and find out if your okay
but im pretty sure that aint a good idea
more for me then you
anyways good job
and keep writing dont knwo when ill be on again
but i hope to see some more fantastic poem
tata for now lmfao

Keenan