Silence of Time: Serene Appearnce

Holy mashed potato ..
I LOVED IT ..i mean the imotion involved is tearing .. god bless you .. you truly have a talent ..

You're back! <3 Thankyou for your kind words on Raw, by the way.

Anyway. I like how it starts off so slowly and builds to this manic crescendo before levelling off.

I get the impression of an immortal that's long since ceased to be able to care about anything because they've lived so long, and yearss eem so short.

And about the first comment thing, barely any of my stuff gets a review yo. XD

SHWABANG! *jk* if i had any food..i would have put it down. this is serioiusly amazing...i love the vocabulary and the imagry and the constant reference to silence and nothingness. simply wonderful.

Suspended in motion, moments turn to years
Replayed over hours as they turn to minutes
Further slowed to seconds
Every detail as clear as the instance of happening

^ suspended in motion...moments turn to years...that actually makes me think of my best friend. how quickly time passes...

Anger loudly blares inside the silence
Sorrow slowly echos and dies out completely
Pain sporadically bursts in and out, almost forgotten except for the scars
Emotion shrieking inside your memories
Better left unrecollected

^ wow. honestly..just like, wow. i understand this. "better left unrecollected" it hurts less if you don't think about it...

Mute the blur of time spent
Calm the raging pistons inside your mind
Follow deeper into time
Drown in the silence

^ drowning in the silence is something i do far too often..

Court the demons well versed in torture
Lead the way to better feeding grounds
Of despair and broken trusts
Fragmented memories of forgotten wishes
Roaming the silence of time

^ "fragmented memories of forgotten wishes" definitely my favorite line in the entire poem...definitely

Asphyxiate in the quietude of eons
As time moves peacefully forward
Eradicating times once held so dear
Lulling into deep sleep
Forever in serene appearances

^ once again...constant reference to time and quiet....wonderful..

superb job, danielle...5/5

Holy shit girl! that was so cool! I wonder why it is that some many people are talented with phrases like that? lol I don't have that much going for me in poems... I am sorta... like... rhyming and such, but never anything that deep!!
I love how you write your poetry! Great Job!
5/5!!

Oh wow. that amazing my favorite line would have to be memories hold hostanges with links to the past. !! i loved reading it dear. the meaning with in it... wow.... good work!!