Another great poem. It was very descriptive. The flow was flawless and the wording made
it all the more perfect. The imagery you
created was great, too, and the emotion you
captured was incredible. you are a very
talented writer/poet. :] great write. 5/5.

Love the name of the poem and how it doesnt give away the whole poem.. i also really like the stanza:
"I'll burn the pictures, burn every book.
I'll burn the clothes with one last look.
While standing there naked, completely bare,
with slang words thrown, I won't even care."

i thought it was one of the best ones in the poem.
very nice flow.. although i think this line is a bit out of rhythm : "I'm deciding to finally win this orgasmick fight."
might have something to do with the "orgasmic" .
very strong poem all the same, awesome job:)
5/5

This was pretty well written. I don't care much for some of the rhyming in the first stanza, but that didn't interrupt the flow, which is good.

Although I have to say that I didn't know the main idea/theme of the poem until after the second stanza, maybe if you spread your ideas a bit more throughout the verses without getting out of chronological order.

This was pretty well written. I don't care much for some of the rhyming in the first stanza, but that didn't interrupt the flow, which is good.

Although I have to say that I didn't know the main idea/theme of the poem until after the second stanza, maybe if you spread your ideas a bit more throughout the verses without getting out of chronological order.

Good poem, but the flow was a bit off. I loved the rhyming though. That's probably the best thing in the whole poem. Other than that, it was a bit off. Good job though.

.:CiNdY:.

This poem is very true when it comes to many of our lives. its crazi bout how perfect this poem is. my fav stanza is

The life I'm living that seems but a lie -
I've done it over and over, all I do is try.
But, i can't seem to figure out what went wrong,
so I'll stand here hard all night long

i dont know how, but this was rlly perfect

Awsome poem girl! It is rather easy for me to relate to at the moment. I really like the last stanza....
The life I'm living that seems but a lie -
I've done it over and over, all I do is try.
But, i can't seem to figure out what went wrong,
so I'll stand here hard all night long.

I'm still trying to figure out what went wrong in my life that I haven't fixed yet. :(

Anyway, great piece of work and you expressed yourself very throughly in this piece. I could sense the confusion and frustration in it. 5/5 as always ;) Keep writing, I love your poetry :)