This is a really good poem. i like how you how to make it complex without taking from the overall rhythm and feel

I really love this one
But i got confused right here

The present has no future, so the future has no past
The past is just my grave yard, for my lonely ghosts regret

But i really love.....

I build
A stronger fortress from heart break, still
I never slept so soundly as when I felt
Your breath on my neck

I feel like you are saying no matter how much you build up and sheild yourself, you still feel the true reality of what has happened

Like wow! that was awesome, i really enjoyed the rhymes as a first, and the repitition was really neat, my fav lines were defintely:
>'Hollow being, hollow whispering, hollow inside
Hollow is what I am, without you by my side'<
the repitition really improved the flow. i thought while i was reading it that it could be made into a song..your volcabulary was great too, i really enjoyed it. the imagery in the last stanza was also a plus. overall it was neat, i really enjoyable read!
take care x

I think this poem is brilliant. The flow and word usage were very good. And the concept was so ... interesting. I don't think I could've stopped reading if I wanted to. But what really put this piece together was the last stanza. It flowed beautifully and the word usage was ... amazing. This is probably one of the best endings I have ever read to a poem. 5/5!