Only Time (Collab with Jess)

by Kalee   Jan 16, 2008


We would like to dedicate this poem to the two wonderful guys that have come into our lives. Even though we live so far apart we can't wait until we are together. Jess is dedicating this to Chris and Kalee is dedicating this to David
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My love for you is never ending
Just like the distance in between
At times it gets a little too much
Yet still the future brightly beams

I look forward to that single day
So I can finally be in your arms
I'll laugh with you, see your smile
You'll protect me from all harm

I keep dreaming of the wonderful day
When I'll finally be safe with you
Acting just like our magic charm
Will be the love between me and you

A charm that will not be broken
No matter what people say and do
Their words not having any effect
On the deep love that I have for you

So whisper to me that this is forever
And reassure me that it will be fine
Hold me close now, but from afar
And remind me that it's only time

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    So, I am not a big fan of typical love poetry and I like some parts of this piece, others don't.
    First stanza grabbed my attention, very interesting, nice start, filled with feelings that you expressed on a good way.
    Second stanza somehow didn't kept my attention, I don't like choice of words in it and I think that you can say same thing on more powerful and unique way.
    Third stanza is again great with strong, clearly described emotions.
    I don't like fourth stanza, your repetition of word-charm- totally throw me off and I just don't like the flow of it.
    Ending is fine, touching I suppose, and it has excellent tone.
    All in all this isn't a bad poem, and I am just honest and I am telling my opinion, it just didn't impressed me to much.

  • 16 years ago

    by Someone who listens

    I like this poem but in a way it makes me sad because i know wat its like to have a long distance relationship and miss someone so much. At least he is back now... anyways i give it a 10/10

    Cheers

  • 16 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    "I look forward to that single day" = "I look forward to that ONE day"
    ~for sake of the flow

    "So I can finally be in your arms" = "When I can finally be in your arms" ~again, for sake of the flow (then again, I may have the flow wrong)

    Okay, well, punctuation is a must. Umm, the flow was very wishy washy, and I think you should have fixed it before posting it, but it still is a swell poem.
    Well done, especially for a collaboration =]

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 16 years ago

    by David

    Thats dam right! i loved it too, wow it was great. :D the meaning was awesome and the love from you two girls is not disputable...

    l o v e i t! ! 5/5 david

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