Wow...
This is mind-blowing, truly powerful from the beginning to the end. Excellently written, filled with emotions and very vivid descriptions. You did great job with rhymes and created flawless flow in the whole piece despite very long lines. I enjoyed in every stanza soaked in raw emotions. The third stanza is my favorite- very descriptive and effective.
Amazingly done!

Only one mistake in this poem hun,
"whereas" I think it's ment to me "where as"
Sorry if I'm picky, just thought i'd let you know.

This was quite unique, I must say. How you started this piece was deep, really deep. Some how you've been managing lately to really grasp onto my attention and hold in there. I've told you before how I love your new style, but again I must say it. It's getting better and better each time I read another one of your poems. The first lines of the first and fourth stanza, Amazing. I can't express that enough. I would pick out favorite lines but that's impossible. I just read it again as i'm writing this and each line hit me hard throughout the poem. You really know what I love these days. Again you have written a mind blowing poem which speaks so deeply and so emotionally into my soul. Well done sweetie. 5/5 ~Mel

Funny, I was hoping it would never end. Though I would rather a sweeter more cute title like this one, but it's up to you.

I really loved this poem. The entrance into it is smooth and you quickly warm up to the unknown main character, and I found that I can relate to the emotions you portrayed. Your metaphors and simile's were flabbergasting, taking my breath away with swelling pride that a fellow human could write so beautifully =]

You have made me proud! I really and truly like this poem, and it is touching.

Wonderful piece,

5/5
~stephen white

Gosh, the title speak for itself. this was intense, and so deep. i loved your wording tho tammie, well done.

5/5 david

I loved ths poem! I don't even know this guy and I don't like him :) Great work! Keep it up.

Excellent just excellent

Definitely interesting....I'm interested enough to read your second part so good job!

Hey...
i was just wondering...
did you really write this poem?
no offence meant but i know there's another site with this exact poem