I enjoyed this poem deeply, from start until finish it held my interest painted a beautiful chant like flow. The length of it was perfect, short yet you expressed everything throughout it easily. Your word choice simple yet elegant, I loved the smoothness of this piece. You opened this poem with strength and you ended it with strength. Nice title btw. Well done. A great read. ~Mel

Wow, I honestly think that you improving your writing, this poem is incredible, very deep and all descriptions in it are so vivid and truly remarkable.
I like your word choice, it is very good and in this piece rhyming isn't forced at all which is great cause now rhymes in this poem left great impression on me and help you to create very interesting, original flow. You also made a captivating atmosphere here and I just want to say-bravo!

Hmm. its very peculiar. I like the depth and the emotion. it has a split side, like a cute ness and a serious ness. I dont get the structure much, i dont see one. i mean it rhymes at first and then fdoesnt and has different amount of lines in each stanza, but i think with a little editing it could be very good

Amazing. i think that you should change this
"The things we dont want the shadows seem to cover
so we run in fear
as one thing we believe is another"

to

"The things we dont want
the shadows seem to cover
so we run in fear
as one thing we believe is another."

i think it looks better.
great 5/5

This poem was absolutely amazing. I think in the second stanza there was a little mistake with the lines, but other than that, it's a great poem. Very well written. Good job.

.:CiNdY:.

Well this is an interesting topic to write a poem about, I can't say I've read anything like it before.

"Denial flees once we understand
the cold dark truths that are actually at hand."

I thought the pun "cold dark truths" was quite brilliant.

Keep writing.

Interesting, but a lot of it I really don't understand. I'm not sure why, maybe its just that the transition from one stanza to another is a little too sudden and more should have been written to really get at the point in between. But who am I to judge? Maybe its just the AP English class-goer talking.

This is a great poem. It has interesting diction, and flows very smoothly. 5/5

Nice, well written, thanks for your comment on my poem, i will definately take your advice. 5/5

Amazing!
i loved it
great poem
5/5
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p.s thanx 4 commenting