Just when you think your life is ok

That is one inspiring poem. i agree with everything you say. i used to be like you and judge people before i got to know them. but as time passed by and i met new people along the road, i realized that i have no right in judging anyone. everyone is different in one way or another, whether it's their looks, their personality, the way they behave etc. you cant judge a person if you dont know the person. i enjoyed reading your piece very much. keep up the good work!! =D

I think this has the potential to be a good poem. but it seems like it is set with in paragraphs instead of stanzas.

for example:

Just when you think your life is going okay
something happens and you just fall apart.. whether its because you got lied to and then found out the truth, or you realized someone wasn't who you thought they were or that you seem to be just messing everything up

istead write

Perfect life with in your eyes
then everything seems to fall apart
lies with in truth
truth with in lies

or you can keep to your original format but break it up more

example:

Just when you think your life
is going okay; something happens
you just fall apart..
whether its because you got lied to
and then found out the truth,
or you realized someone
wasn't who you thought they were
or that you seem to be just messing everything up

it has great potential.. but when i read it i seen a poem within a story instead of a story with in a poem

I agree with this. i am always judge without being known first and it just shows you u that the people who actually took the time to get to kno you are are ur true frineds in life

Great Job. Easy to tell this came from the heart. Keep it up! 5/5

--Jack

Well I think this is a very well written poem it is definetly truthful and right in saying what it does.. It's true though people shouldn't be judged like we like to do and I mean we all do at some point or another. So great job I enjoyed reading it.

Beck