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First off, this was more like a quote. I think you could extend on this and make it longer, or if not, write this in stanza's, instead of just an ongoing sentence. This was very hard to read because of all the spelling and grannar errors, my suggestion would be to use spell check before submitting your poem. Also, I feel like you came up with this in ten seconds. There is so much work that can be done.....

"Your body and soul belongs to me. for eternity thats the way it will always be ."

Okay, after "me" there is no need for a period, instead place a comma after it.

"thats" should be "that's".

Delete the extra space after "be".
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"i love u being apart of my life u full fill my dreams your so nice i can't let u go cause that would be suicide i want u in my life till the end of time ."

All of the "i"s should be capitalized, just proper grammar. And all of the "u"s should be "you".

~"apart" should be "a part".

~A comma needs to be after "life".

~"full fill" should be "fulfill".

~Place a period after "dreams".

~Capitalize the "y" in "your"

~"Your" should be "You're".

~Comma after "nice".

~Period after "suicide".

~Delete space after "time".

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I am voting this piece a 2, there was just about no effort put into the poem. Just with the corrections made there could still be much more improvements. Such as more descriptive words, not just the same cliche words. And more imagery.

Please feel free to PM me, if you have any questions.

Take care and God Bless!