Comments : Blackened Lungs And A Broken Heart

  • 16 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    I really like this, the words are witty and clever yet portray your sadness perfectly, my favourite line was

    Insurance doesn't cover lost love and baby I'm broke

    my only criticism is the first line it should be "too" instead of "to"

  • 16 years ago

    by dora

    Aww this was realli sad.
    this was realli deep and touching

    this was my fave bit
    "You get goosebumps when your soul mate touches you,
    I always thought I was just cold, I guess I was wrong;
    I blew what we always called us, now it is just me-
    You're out there and I am here slowly falling apart...
    "
    5/5 keep it up xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Corrections:

    " One to many " ::: too*
    " but sweetie your gone... " ::: you're*

    OMG! I loved this Amber, you have no idea. It's perfect, with TWO mistakes. There were a few places that could have used commas but were not needed. But, oh my gosh. It's one of my favorites by you. even though I've not stayed caught up, I think it's up in the top 5. x]

    You have so much talent, babe.
    I hope you continue to use it over and over and over and over.

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    This poem is seriosuly one of the most amazing poems I've ever read in my life. The title, again, drew me in, but the read itself was just. .WOW. The emotions were so deep, so intense, I began to tear up! And lately, poems haven't been able to keep my interest, I don't know why. BUT this poem was like. :O WOAH-MY-GOSH-ah-mazing! This poem's going into my favorites! 45676798/5. [lol]

  • 16 years ago

    by Lance

    Wow!

    5/5