It was a great poem but it has some flaws in it because of the constant change in the story - well maybe it's just me. Nonetheless it was still a fine written piece.

5/5 from me :)

This poem is really good. i love this poem as well.

This is a beautiful poem! I am soooo jealous of this Amira girl! lol. I want a guy to write me poetry like I write for him! Ahh, oh well. Anyway, back to the poem. I absolutely loved it. You are a very talented writer, and I love everything I have read by you.

Dont listen to them...a poem you write can NEVER have flaws...because it comes from what YOU feel<3