No, it's not perfect but then again, none are. You spoke of feeling and desire....i like it. Please keep writing...xoxo

I like this poem it's really good

Aw! this is adorabley sweet! love it. definitely got the emotions. so pure. (^^)

It's perfect just the way it is!

I love this. It's cute and straight to the point, and I'm sure a LOT of people can relate to feeling this way.

Keep up the great writing!

Wow this is really good, in my favourites for sure