Comments : This life

  • 11 years ago

    by Viola

    "There is no such thing as freedom so why return to reality when all it will do is cause physical and emotional pain."

    Oh how I wish we stayed in fantasy world forever. The world would be so much simpler if we could all just make it up inside our own heads. It's too bad life doesn't allow for that once you've outgrown the innocence of childhood.
    I like the concept of what you wrote..it's a unique way of looking at life.
    Keep holding on my dear. =]
    --Viola

  • 11 years ago

    by Beautiful Disaster

    Once again, your writing is flawless
    and i can connect so well with this part so well
    "lost in this made-up world I call home"

    you have amazing talent
    and i'm jealous!<3

    --jess

  • 11 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    This is very intresting. i agree to all of wht u said on here.. i liked it very much

  • 11 years ago

    by FridusBlueheaven

    This poem is just simply great. Simple but very emotional. I can relate it from line to line. Excellently written, 5/5!!!

  • 11 years ago

    by TheRapture03

    That was really good. It has alot of good imagry, and the words you chose were strong and powerful. good job 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by JEFF

    Way different from what I'm use to. but the story kep me intrigued and want more. great write =) 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem reminds me of my ex who is the image of my avatar

    I seems that when she is behind bars she is more free from her worst enemy I somehow doubt she could see the truth that is expressed well in this poem,
    especially this line "freedom with chains holding me back. There is no such thing as freedom so why return to reality when all it will do is cause physical and emotional pain"

    whether it is an addict chained to an addiction or trying to escape an addiction this poem reflects the illusion being captured by a desire to be free

    well done

    ps... there is a way to use emotional pain thus gaining more control by surrender

  • 10 years ago

    by Soulful Ensemble

    This reminds me of myself and how I wrote a lot when I started writing.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jay Perry Jr

    Very good i can relate alittle to this poem