GET OUT OF YOUR COMFORT ZONE CONTEST! Round 2 Poems

Here are the entries, judges have all the poems & I'll post the scores & comments when they are done. Enjoy!

1 Cataclysm (Limerick)

I simply must announce,
that this poem I denounce,
from being the leader in the score,
for I would class this as a bore,
with a title I cannot pronounce.

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2 Tragedy (Triolet)

Only because you're my tragedy
I will die a million times every day;
entrapped in my own destiny,
only because you're my tragedy.
I can't cheat what's meant to be,
even if I relive my yesterdays,
only because you're my tragedy
I will die a million times every day.

------->> With the rhyme scheme added.

A/ Only because you're my tragedy
B/ I will die a million times every day;
a/ entrapped in my own destiny,
A/ only because you're my tragedy.
a/ I can't cheat what's meant to be,
b/ even if I relive my yesterdays,
A/ only because you're my tragedy
B/ I will die a million times every day.

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3 Mother Mayhem (Nove Otto)

Wind bustles through the ragged trees
Mother Nature down on her knees
begging for the absolute storm
destruction falling like lightning
the perfect harmony dwindling
she wreaks havoc in expert form
allowing rain to purify
cleansing our souls of all awry
bringing our world back to the norm.

**some syllable counts may seem to be off due to the way people pronounce words. Please take note that words like purify and harmony, when pronounced the way I (and everyone around me) has 3 syllables. "The perfect harmony dwindling" = 1 2 3 2
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4 Two Left Feet (Nove Otto)

I learn my heart has two left feet,
As it begins to skip a beat;
Two steps forward and five behind
As we dance to a silly rhyme.
Yet still I can not call you mine,
Because my love gets undermined
Every single time I have tried
I trip again and lose my pride,
Stumbling into the undefined.

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5 Selective Listening (cascade)

Spewing from your mouth are promises, lies, and faults
Giving me reason to shut off all active listening
My ears now dormant to your incompetent words

Possessing your mind is a conceited, care-free attitude
Affecting your soul are corruptive, immoral, demonic ways
Spewing from your mouth are promises, lies, and faults

A blackened heart, not even the sun can beam forth light
A filthy mouth that no cleanser can make pure-
Giving me reason to shut off all active listening

Twisted truths that I no longer believe
has ruined my line of thinking, changed how I listen
My ears now dormant to your incompetent words

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6 Entities of Water (Nove Otto)

Pure life endows from one intake
A single sip it's all it takes
from fluids, clear as innocence
to fortify anyone's health.
More important than any wealth?
those purifying substances,
They withhold the talent to heal
And to bestow something real,
like the aqua of their essence.

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7 Bleeding rose (Triolet)

Simple white rose laced in red
romantic mix of purity an love
speaking words that can't be said
simple white rose laced in red
touch her heart let feelings spread
attached on wings of a mourning dove
simple white rose laced in red
romantic mix of purity an love

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8 As I Weep (Cascade)

Longing lips sway into a smile
while your eyes engulf my soul
yet the memory still stings, as I weep

A heart forever echoes goodbye
with the remnants of a promise;
longing lips sway into a smile

I search for the trite truth
behind kisses and nostalgia
while your eyes engulf my soul

Our love hid behind a facade
of words too sweet for comfort
yet the memory still stings, as I weep

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9 Unborn Child (Nove Otto)

I picture your smile, oh, so sweet
Kissing your cheeks, tickling your feet
My darling, it's you in my dreams
Holding you close ever so tight
Falling asleep with me at night
Eyes that melt me, eyes that would gleam
Though I know, it may never be
That I'll have a child, made from me
For now, darling, please let me dream

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10 Blossoming Love (Triolet)

Love blossomed between us, both had no clue.
it was unexpected, momentous and blew us away.
My mind was racing with thoughts of you,
love blossomed between us, both had no clue.
We thought it was infatuation but our love proved true,
our hearts united and our smiles widened by the day.
Love blossomed between us, both had no clue,
it was unexpected, momentous and blew us away.

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11 Angel of Music (Triolet)

Hide not phantom behind shadows of song
Embrace the ignorant, with what they yearn
Concoct your symphony, though doubts are strong
Hide not phantom behind shadows of song
This masquerade has go on far too long
Let your lyrics out-shine the mask they spurn
Hide not phantom behind shadows of song
Embrace the ignorant, with what they yearn

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12 Nightfall (Novo Otto)

You were a Saturday nightfall;
a thousand phantom leaves would sprawl
'gainst the valley of my waist and
breathed bluebells from jawline to wrist.
The city who never sleeps midst
moss train tracks of your timeworn hands,
eyes that mimed Van Gogh's starry night,
a body weaved in fairy lights -
a memory I can't withstand

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13 It's All in the Way (Cascade)

It's all in the way you look at me,
like a thorn pressing upon skin
as the bitten rose of Winter past
lies forgotten beneath your stare

Life unravels its knotted strings,
untouched by rainbows, painted thick
with fading flowers and violins and
it's all in the way you look at me

As shadows lay on the edge of reality
paradise becomes a forsaken dream,
while memories of love sting my soul
like a thorn pressing upon skin

Time that once held promises
of Spring flowers and Autumn's breeze
now sleeps torn and tattered,
as the bitten rose of Winter past

And as sand drips through the moonlight
and seeps through the cracks of dawn
another tear, another tortured smile,
lies forgotten beneath your stare

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14 Better Half (Cascade)

Even after all this time
I can't decide, so please tell me
Are you or am I my better half?

My heart doesn't beat, but ring;
alarming me, not to trust you,
Even after all this time.

Would newly alphabetizing
help for us to rhyme finally?
I can't decide, so please tell me.

Sympathy inflames, but burns weaker,
falls to dust and raises like phoenix.
Are you or am I my better half?

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15 Bathtub Limerick

I was warm in the bath one day
when I heard a strange voice say
"who's that in my bath?
my god, are you daft?"
in the neighbor's bathroom did I lay

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16 Night Music (Triolet)

While days creep forward as a tired song
in the nights i do not sleep.

The stars are broken, they sing all wrong
while days creep forward as a tired song.
The music fades but i stay strong.

Dreams are memories i cannot keep,
while days creep forward as a tired song.
In the nights i do not sleep.

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17 Silence, speaks the Deepest (Cascade)

If words are not enough; hunt for actions.
Let loose the tears you heartedly cherish.
Simply, do trust the power of silence.

When thoughts fall short before you, failing
to create a language that she can understand;
if words are not enough, hunt for actions.

But if actions couldn't craft the confession, words
failed to raise up; weakened by emotions, then-
let loose the tears you heartedly cherish.

And if your eyes didn't reflect enough the depth
of your passion, then be still inside her eyes.
Simply, do trust the power of silence.

Again, pnq members are awesome...these were really good u guys!

This will be even tougher for the judges.. All the best!!!

I can't wait haha Again the waiting game.

Lol Looks like the judges have a hard time ahead of them. Wow!!! So many awesome poems.

Good luck everyone and good luck to the judges!!!

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Again some very awesome poems have been produced in round two...way to got everyone...I bet most of you thought you couldn't write a formed poem to save yourselves....just goes to show...never say never and...this is what this contest is really about. Even if you don't get through to the final round..most of you will have achieved something you never really seen youself as doing....well done to you all and...good luck!

To Larry...

Thanks for running the show while I've been gone living the movie Eat, Pray, Love haha!!! Kinda skipped most of the pray part (does meditation count?)...pina coladas are very good here BTW!

Jamesina Bond.....

Long as the meditation is spiritual, it doesn't necessarily have to be religious.
Don't let too many Pina Coladas interrupt the flow of your Chi.
Glad you're finished with the dangerous portion of your mission; hope M lets you stay on R & R.

Great poems everyone!

Man I'm impatient.... I was just thinking 'jeeze, it's been like a week since he's posted these!'... nope.. only two days. I'm a little off in my time lol

I've got a feedback opportunity.

I will not post the scores until I have them from all judges. However, would y'all like me to post the comments early?

Not that I am a judge or participant but I would like to see the comments and compare them to my own thoughts on each poem and see how closely they are alike.

It would be lovely to see the comments. Just to give us a dose of what we need lol

I agree the comments would be nice to see :)

Same here. It would be nice to see the comments :)

I would enjoy reading the comments as well

ME TOO :D we want the comments, Larry Larry

I wonder, have they commented on all the poems yet or just some?

Lioness, that dog is so cute!

Lol thank you.

Her name is Austin she's my baby

Aww! I don't want to take up the thread with my love for dogs but she is beautiful, I love how shes looking right at the camera :)

Yeah she's adorable. I absolutely love her. It is my fav pic of her :">

To be honest I'm pretty curious too! :)

BUT I ALWAYS PROMISED THERE WOULD BE MORE..AND...THERE ...isn't....

WELL....I CAN'T DISAPPOINT YOU ALL SO...OF COURSE THERE IS....JUST HAVE TO RAKE THROUGH LARRY'S SHED ONCE MORE SO...

WATCH THIS SPACE......CREDIT CARDS AT THE READY FOLKS....

And...there is MORE !!! For the members who have been knocked out there is an opportunity for you all!!!!! Write me a GLOSA VERSE..yes that right!!! I suggested this form for the regular comp to Larry...he said NO...the judges said NO so...yeah...show me what you've really got? Of course, I would not ask you to write anything I haven't already tried....I've written two of these so...challenging to say it's hard but not impossible and...it's your wildcard perhaps....deadline..jeezzzz let me look at the P&Q clock and get back on that one....write...write...write.... for now!!!

http://www.poetry-nut.com/glosa_poetry.htm

an example

http://www.best-love-poems.com/poems.php?id=1096049

Soon as a get any complete set of comments I'll post them. Meanwhile, I"M going to try a Glosa Verse.

Here are the first set of comments, scores removed:

Judge 1
1 Cataclysm (Limerick)

Limericks are fun and this piece is FUN. I giggled as I read this.... This piece is far from boring....
The title is perfect and all around it's a cute poem. Well done~

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2 Tragedy (Triolet)

Triolets to me are like a song.... As I read this piece I could actually sing it..which I did several times... I LOVE THIS PRETTY POEM.... I screamed that last line because I wanted everyone to hear me... ha ha this is by far one of my favorite Triolet's that I have read to date.....Beautiful!
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3 Mother Mayhem (Nove Otto)

I have to say, with nature pieces alone, detail and imagery is very important and this piece is beautiful. I really love the word usage to describe Mother Natures chaos.... You painted an excellent design of how powerful and yet how soothing in the end....really a pretty piece... and the Nove Otto form was excellent! Well done~
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4 Two Left Feet (Nove Otto)

This little piece dazzles the reader... To me it's a dancing poem and as I was reading, I was tapping my foot....well enjoyed!
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5 Selective Listening (cascade)

You did a wonderful piece here and the form was well done.... The message was powerful and heartfelt...full of emotion...very nice!

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6 Entities of Water (Nove Otto)

Beautiful display of words here within this Nove otto...very captivating~

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7 Bleeding rose (Triolet)

Such a deep and heart gripping piece here... filled with beauty mixed with sadness.... Just excellent!

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8 As I Weep (Cascade)

"Longing lips sway into a smile"
^^^^ love this sweet and precious, creative line!
This poem sings elegant tones....with a touch of sadness, very pretty piece~

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9 Unborn Child (Nove Otto)

Touching and heart gripping piece...made me teary, and when poems can move the reader, that says a lot... well done~

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10 Blossoming Love (Triolet)

Romantic and touching piece...
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11 Angel of Music (Triolet)

Oh the elegant flow of this Triolet is breathtaking....Elegant and powerful piece ~

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12 Nightfall (Novo Otto)

This piece is absolutely BEAUTIFUL.... I can't express enough how enchanting this poem is...It simply dazzles and oozes in wonderful word imagery ~ well done
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13 It's All in the Way (Cascade)

I'm getting poetically paralyzed by this piece! The tones of nature..are just wow!
"And as sand drips through the moonlight
and seeps through the cracks of dawn
another tear, another tortured smile,
lies forgotten beneath your stare "
^^^^^ this stanza makes my mouth drop!

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14 Better Half (Cascade)

Creative twist in words....very nice~

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15 Bathtub Limerick

*Giggles*, this poem is cute and refreshing, such as a bath :-) very nice~

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16 Night Music (Triolet)

This poem flows like a lullaby, very pretty ~

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17 Silence, speaks the Deepest (Cascade)

Powerful and Inspirational piece, very nice~

Hellon you have a wicked evil side LOL Glosa Verse OMG nooooooooooooooo

How many rounds are there again???

Two more rounds
I did my glosa-

TJ...I remember you taking up my challenge to write a Glosa a few years back and doing a remarkable job if it too! Then you challenged a few other members and the results were pretty awesome :)

Larry....nice to see you taking up the challenge yourself although you can't enter it obviously, which is a pity because you, also have done a wonderful job. Check it out folks...

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/life/poems.php?id=1188849

Not sure if anyone is willing to take up this wildcard challenge but, if so, they need to be in before round 3 starts which is pretty soon I'd imagine...check times with Larry please.

Hellon, I think you should give away lamingtons next. These lot don't know what they're missing.

Great work guys, enjoyed a lot of these poems.

Mel...I doubt Larry would have any lamingtons in his shed but...OMG what a great idea :) I've been stuffing my face with mangos today because they're in season right now and...this afternoon I stripped my fig trees so... perhaps fruit lamingtons?...if Larry allows me to give anymore freebies away....I think I've given him an ulser already LMAO!