Did I do a good job? And could you give me a title?

  • David Paul
    20 years ago

    Hey guys this is a new style of poetry I'm working on and I just want to know what you guys think.

    Tears flow out of this never ending blackness of an abiss known as my soul, and what have you done to help? Nothing!! All you can and have done is fuel this hurt, this constant repetitious emotional beating that has been issued to me time and time again. Every moment in which I have disagreed with your governing capability you have charged me with attemptingto belittle your authority over the only other significant persons in my meager existance.

    And that's what I have so far. Please tell me what you think. Oh and I need a title for it. Could any of you help? It would be more than appreciated. l8erz. kilman = David B.

  • David Paul
    20 years ago

    Please?

  • Emma
    20 years ago

    i like so far. no i dont know a title. my poem title suck any way so. your looking at the wrong. but i did like it.

  • Selfrejected
    20 years ago

    Fueled to disagree?

  • undying blusher
    20 years ago

    I like Ryan's suggestion ^ or just "Fuel"

    And that's really good! Tell me when you're finished please. :)

    xxx

  • gasping for air
    20 years ago

    its good.. but in order to come up with a name i need to read the rest of the poem... so lemme know when you finish and i can try to help.. if you still need it
    much love
    amanda

  • David Paul
    20 years ago

    Thanks for the input guys. kilman = David B.