Looking for Critics

Hey, I was just wondering if anyone out there could offer me some constructive criticism on my poetry. I know there is a lot to be worked on, but i can't find exactly what. There's always something missing. Any constructive critiscism and tips would be most gratefully received.

Yours Sincerely,
A.B.Kirkman

i'm cool with that, if you do me the simple favor of reading my newest poem, This Lullaby...
and it's a deal.

i did a few, im not sure if i helped at all lol cause your like 10 times better then me so i dont know how much my advice is worth haha but i commented your very good!!

I did two of them, and I think I pinpointed a weakness in your writing, (with all do respect.)

sure