Abstract Poetry contest

Alrighty,.. since it seems no one else is having contests, I'll have one of my own.. All I ask of you is to show me your most creative/intelligent/thought-provoking poem. More weight will be placed on content, flow and all of the former.. Don't really prefer strict rhyme scheme, unless it's really really good.. Let's say Dec 30,.. depending on how many submissions there are.

Incentives?
1st P - 3 comments (honest and constructive)
2nd P - 2 '
3rd P - 1 '

that pretty girl

There is always a pretty girl
At every school
But this one is different
You all think you know her

but...

What if I was to tell you
That her perfect pretty face
Is nothing more then a mask?

What if I was to tell you
That under those big blue eyes
Are bruise coloured rings
Hidden by lying make up

What if I was to tell you
That under that fashionable top
Is a heart that aches
From the misuse it has felt

What if I was to tell you
That under her happy laugh
Is the sound of her unhappiness
A silent scream no one can hear

What if I was to tell you
That under that expensive bracelet
Are the scars of a desperate girl
Searching for a way to escape

What if I was to tell you
That although you must
Think you know this girl
None of you do

None of you at all

"Sinking Ship"

Sinking Ship,
Tattered Wings,
Broken Heart,
Or So It Seems.

I Hit An Iceberg,
With Silent Screams.
Don't Know If Ill Make It,
With These Broken Dreams.

I Hate This Life,
With Tattered Wings.
I Hate This Life,
When Agony It Brings.

So Much Written Deceit,
On An Empty Page.
I Feel So Broken Hearted,
I Hope Its Just A Stage.

She Is The Iceberg Of My Life.
Lord, Let Me Put Her Under My Feet.
I Can't Stand This Coldness,
What I Truly Need Is Heat.

~David

The Paradox:

Surrounded by walls from every direction
Mastering laws to fight the infection
Oblivious to where the road is heading
The maze holding you might be never ending

Searching for an exit
you still have some hope
The longer you keep running though
you feel like reaching for the rope

Ignorance is driving you insane
you're life's like "the Trial"
You don't understand the game
Existence is your paradox
Dilemma is your life
Wishing you had no concience
it's a doom living in strife

My poem is called "Perfect Sleep".... it is kind of long, but please read it anyway, as it has a very good hidden message. thanks.

For everything tumultuous in life
There is a reasonable explanation
Even for all the unavoidable pain
Giving in to your hearts frustration.

I thought that being strong,
Meant you had to hide your soul
But you cant hide true emotions
It just digs a deeper darker hole.

I remember all the happy times
We shared and made together,
So close our friendship, as was our love
But I guess nothing can last forever.

Only the sun can bring me happiness,
It warms my heart and soul,
It brought me what I yearn to feel
But night came, and from me, it stole.

In my mind I created the perfect world
Where everything wrong was right,
Nothing could make me feel unhappy.
A warm blanket hugging me at night.

A place where nobody hurt, nobody hated,
People loved and shared.
Youd never feel unwanted or worthless
No worries or need to be scared.

No one was ever lonely here,
Someone would hold you hand if need
And dry your tears when you cried your sorrows
And help your soul be freed.

Taking in a deep breathe of air,
Relief that I can be in this place for a while,
I breathe out, remembering I had to wake up
This "perfect world" is the only place I smile.

I would like to stay there forever;
Id like forever to stay within me,
A cold shadow of dark ran over this place
Ruining my creation, which now I cant see.

These thoughts kept running through my mind,
This very unrealistic dream I dreamt,
But either way my heart cracked a smile
Only my hope, will keep away lifes contempt

Dont ever give up on anything
Especially if u still want to try
Listen to your heart and soul
Never let anything pass you by.

If life just makes you want to cry
wipe away your tears
The pain will just keep building up
Bringing out your inner most fears.

If you dont have all the answers you want
To the questions that you still dont know
Dont stop asking for their meaning
Or itll eat your inside, and continue to grow

Dont say that you dont love him
If deep down, you really cant let him go
Spiteful words may hurt your feelings
But the silence, hurts more than youll know.

There are certain things in life
That cant be avoided or hidden away
Dont hold in what you really feel
Get your inner most thoughts out, and say

Through the storm, a rainbow appears
It may seem like its far, far away
There is still hope, just keep looking above
For the sun again will shine someday.

I love you more, than youll ever know,
I just wish you could see it too
Even if u dont ever love me back,
Ill forever and always love you.

Ill love you forever, and ever and ever
Till theres no forever left to give
As long as you know, how I feel about you
I can set my soul free and live.

Without you this poem would be nothing,
Without you, I too would be nothing
Thank you for the feelings youve given to me
With you, my perfect world can be something.

So for all the unavoidable pain
Dont hide it all away
Dont dig that hole that buries your soul
And turns you blue sky into dark gray.

Just remember the lasting memories,
And the perfect world that someday you just might,
Get if u truly believe it can come true
With a warm blanket hugging u at night.

Someday youll take in, that deep breathe of hair
Realizing that forever has always been inside you .
You just have to look deeper into your heart
And see that something you never knew, could be true

Breathe out, open up your eyes
And see the bright sunny day.
A feeling that warms your heart forever
Just like the perfect world that can stay.

Waiting Just For You

Baby, let's carve a little into this old oak tree
Lets see how it feels
Let's climb the branches and sleep under the leaves
And drift off in a natural wonder

When we wake up and the city greets us
Try to go asleep again
I won't wake up
'Till I reach paradise

And though it seems so far
I can see the sky dimming with darkened rainbow shades
Thoughts fly through my head
Do I really know you?

Yet I just take your hand
Hold it tightly
Look up at that beautiful sunset
With rivers streaming down my cheeks

When can we ever be alone, in this place again?
Without feeling.. more than friends?
These tears, they're not from pain
But from love, joy, and the will to wait

Tears in the shape of diamonds and stars
Hitting the ground quietly
As I cuddle close
And try to rest

With every breath, I feel more of the world
Smiling with me, crying with me, shaking when I'm scared
And yet when I open my eyes
You're gone.

And here I still wait.
This is what I see
When I try to go to sleep
Seeing that same sunset
Every night

And I'll wait however long
Till everything in my dream becomes real
And I'll cry my tears of joy
Waiting just for you.

Crazy and insane

by Just-take-my-heart-i-want-you-to-have-it

This world is like a movie
never still always moving
when it hurts we feel the pain
the blood falls like drops of rain
fading a way into a dream
out of the darkness we give a scream
rushing comes hope
and with it a rope
all tied up we scream and cry
then we fall and we all die
startled by a scream
we wake up from the dream
with blood on our hands
we wait where it stands
shaking and crying
we see it won't be dying
a cry of pleasure, a cry of pain
we wonder why we're in the rain
we cry for help with no one around
so we settle on the ground
sown to sleep
sleep we creep
woken with furry
off with a hurry
run like crazy
the stranger is lazy
we win the gold
god this is getting old
changing so fast
we shoot with a blast
it just makes it mad
we'd run if we had...
we don't have legs
they are just little pegs
we want out of this dream
it's getting kind of mean
we sit down and cry, cry, cry
but here we lie
in our cozy bed
and we still have our heads

*when i wrote this it came out in multiple people speaking but it was an accident*
~hope you enjoyed it~

Well I'm not exactly sure what you're expecting of abstract poems, but I thought I'd give this poem a try. Happy Holidays and Good Luck to All! :)

Me,Myself, and I

I take a look at my reflection,
All I see is your deception.
From bitter moments to brutal lies,
You're my reason for sweet demise.

The woman staring back at me,
Is trying to fix this catastrophie.
You're the maker of her broken dream,
But her feelings for you aren't what they seem.
She still loves you, and wants to live.
She strives on the happiness you used to give.

The echoing voice swimming in my head,
Sounds shallow as if she's already dead.
The lies you told, made her believe,
That you were the only one for me.
You built her up, and knocked us down,
All of me is heaven bound.

I don't want to feel, I don't want to cry,
And the stranger in the mirror hasn't said goodbye.
The other part of me, inside, is one you've already killed,
So when I take my life tonight, think your goal fulfilled.

'...but now i am found'

Engulfed by her welcoming wing,
on her two feet I stand.
Her beauty overshadows me and I
recall the overwhelming jealousy.

My emerald eyes are spiked,
with tears of losing her.
I cower in her wake as she protects
me from my clumsy failed attempts to strive.

Clinging on, I push her away,
and find comfort in her shadow.
I'm taunted by her excellence, although
I'ts always me to paint the picture green.

And then I see the sunlight;
I venture from her loving warmth,
and crawl away from everything I know
to seek my own mistakes in solitude.

Triumphantly I greet the welcome breeze,
uncovering myself, I set her free
and the glory astounds me.

But gone is the laughter together we shared,
the fun that we had and
the secrets we beared.

I miss the amenities friendship provides,
courageous and honest, I conquer the lies.
Pardon my arrogance, Lord
Forgive my deceit,
Your prodigal son has returned. Amen

***This is probably my most abstract poem.***

Reason Unheard

The words I whisper,
Barely audible:

Lightly lifted,
Transparently gifted.
Smooth to the fingertips,
Removed from the surface of my lips.
Resounding in a dampened cell
Where they crashed when they fell.
Creeping up the stone-cold walls;
Their echoes fill up the halls.
And down the many corridors
Until they reach their founding source.
"Outside, the rain; it pours-
So close the windows, open doors.
Let in the light of day."
These are the words I say.
"Never let what is beyond
Break apart the common bond
Formed by new light, old dark and all between;
By what is plain and what can't be seen."
Now let sweet memories drift before your eyes-
This is where true happiness lies.

"still waters" not sure if it qualifies as abstract

Dive to the depths
of loneliness
plunge through years
of turbulent waves
erasing memories
raging
releasing anger
where pain is no stranger
and secrets promise
to be a friend
open up your heart
pour out all the pain
allow your tears
to dissolve
whilst you lay
your broken soul
upon my floor

Shut down. No more submissions, please. Judging will be around the first or second of January..

How Do You Want To Die?

Do you want to fall,
Slipping silently over space,
For a precious moment contained in eternity,
Then pushed down,
Even further than the ground,
To a pit of darkness so deep,
You will never climb out.

Would you prefer to die in your bed,
After your last words have been said,
To all you hold beloved,
Who watch you as you sleep,
And as you are finally dead.

Or to push another being,
Away from a fatal blow,
To take it yourself,
And die a hero.

There are many ways to die,
And there are many people who have fallen,
Or bled.
This is my question.
How do you want to die?

And my answer is;
Not yet.

My Engel

Sodium thiopental,
Use if to see the dead,
Molten lava fills the sky,
Now you rest your head

Pancuronium,
For once fear doesn't grip you,
All you limbs are now stone,
This is felt by few

Potassium chloride,
Makes you feel no love,
Blood stays where is is,
Feel the kiss of above

In that leathal order,
All you can do is cry,
Heaven at the needle point,
All you need to do is die

*to be ignored*

"Moment of Explosion"

Sixty seconds
The clock has been snorting

One too many lines.

Where is the fu.cking party?
And why wasn't I invited?

So many years, saturated,
Soaking up myriads of memories.

I took a hammer to its face today;
I must have missed
the second hand's last "tock"

Acidic visions fill my mind,
Today I am Salvador Dali.

Morphine coalesced with necessary
Supplements.

Sickening, how ideal fantasies
Fluttered away as I glutted its measures.

?

Long-awaited Results:

1st Place:
Just Rain*
2nd
JHarrison
3rd
sweetenigma

Goodjob, everyone, now go sit in your respective corners. No, seriously.. A lot of good poetry right here; I wanted to give everyone equal weight and not just BS with the judging.. not so sure i've achieved that.. Anyway, awesome job Just Rain; I was amazed by how close to my perception of abstract the poem was. AwEsome

JHarrison.. I was amazed I actually understood your poem.. lol.. But it was pleasantly concrete; the myth and imagery, etc. I also liked how you begin it with lies and end with heaven (totally subjective and possibly irrelevent). The structure complemented the overall idea well..

Sweet, I read this before and definitely enjoyed it.. actually, I'll just comment on that one and another of yours..