grieving,loss contest

  • sarah
    18 years ago

    1st 5 votes 4 comments
    2nd 4 votes 3 comments
    3rd 3 votes 2 comments

    Everyone else 1 vote 1 comment

  • Juls
    18 years ago

    ~You died at the age of nine~

    Couple days after Christmas
    everyone on their holiday break
    Your cousin and you decide to go
    on the frozen lake
    which you thought was safe

    Few minutes go by and the ice breaks in
    you and your cousin both fall in.
    Random people jump into help,
    others call truckers to call for help

    People watching oh so helpless
    Praying, praying you both would
    be OK and praying you guys would
    make it though the night.

    A man with a ladder finally gets your cousin out. Cold and blue but he made it through.
    20 minutes later you get pulled out.
    Cold and blue and unable to move.

    Thinking you might be OK I turned off the news
    If I would have known any better
    I wouldn't have I would have watched you.
    Watched what you went through

    You died that night in a hospital bed,
    with your mom and dad right by the foot of your bed. They were shedding their tears
    wishing you would come back.

    When I found out I cried too.
    Wishing I could have warned you.
    But now I am so blue without you.

    At the age of 9 you died
    I guess it was your time
    To go up to heaven where the
    angels are taking good care of you

    ~R.I.P Tommy

  • Stabbylou
    18 years ago

    Memories Slip

    Memories drift around and round
    And I mourn for you without a sound
    I'm clinging desperately to
    The fading images of you

    No longer determined that my mind
    Believes the sights that it does find
    Was it this way? I'm not sure
    I'm scared to lose what is no more

    It's odd the way you can forget
    Little parts of memoirs set
    And all that's left of them is blurred
    Faces crooked and words are slurred

    Time moves on and leaves behind
    Those crystal pictures in my mind
    There's now a dulled, rose-tinted view
    Of everything I had with you

  • Loulou
    18 years ago

    This is not goodbye
    by Tabby

    Crying by his bedside my tears flow endlessly
    I held his hand so tightly never wanting to let go
    Trying to not think about what is about to be
    I look up at him trying to not let my sadness show

    His eyes are closed his breathing is slow and heavy
    I run my hands through his thick, dark, brown hair
    His handsome face is so pale with the color gray
    That I begin to cry even harder thinking it isn't fair

    Sickness is taking my true love away from me
    Draining away his energy happiness and light
    But not stealing our love away from each other
    That is the one thing that he was able to fight

    His eyes slowly open and he turns toward me
    He smiles a weak smile and touches my cheek
    I feel myself breakdown and burst into sobs
    trying to say don't die but I could no longer speak

    he grabs my hand and pulls me to him
    reaching for my face he brings me into a kiss
    then he hugs me with such a weak embrace
    I hug him so tight never wanting to end this

    Suddenly he lets go I pull myself slowly up
    He looks at me with such sadness in his eyes
    "I love you sweetheart"he says to me
    "I love you but there will be no goodbyes"

    "I love you to" I sob into his shoulder
    I lay on his chest hearing his heart as I cry
    I feel his breathing slowly fade away
    As i sob to myself I say "its ok this is not goodbye".....

  • PURE HEART
    18 years ago


    MY INTERNAL GRIEF...

    In this dark whole world I find myself alone,
    all have departed me and everyone is gone.

    I wonder if one could wipe my tears,
    and my silent scream anyone can hear.

    Eyes have gone wet and lips have gone dried,
    neither anyone understands me nor anyone tried.

    I m crawling in the darkness looking for a beam of light,
    but I realized my life has no day and it has become an endless night.

    I am living the countable moments
    just because god has granted those,
    otherwise I have no urge to live
    without someone loving and close.

    Now a piece of hard heart resides in me full of grief and pain,
    instead of blood, my tears are running through my vein.

    I have end up my journey called life,
    as I have no reason to live and no reason to smile.

    I bid goodbye to all who are far from me as no one is near,
    they don't love me now, so don't wish to be remembered when I am not here....

    BY BHARTI

  • sarah
    18 years ago

    will end after 10 poems are submitted.

  • Latasha
    18 years ago

    Sea of blood and tears
    by Latasha

    No one knew it was your time,
    Everyone thought we'd see you graduate,
    But everything happened all so quickly.
    Your body fell from the sky,
    Only to leave you lifeless on the payment.
    Your body drowned in a sea of blood,
    As people gathered 'round.
    Everyone wanted to hold you close,
    And tell you they loved you.
    Your face is now just a distant memory,
    And your voice has went faint.
    Tears pour down everyones face,
    As they think back to how you were supposed to be here.
    You were supposed to get you diploma today,
    And drink a few beers tonight,
    But now your in a better place,
    Looking down on us,
    And smiling as we do what you thought you'd do someday.

    **RIP Derek Propp... I wasn't in his graduation class but I know many ppl that where...**

  • PS
    18 years ago

    Silver Tears are forever falling
    Down the face of a forgotten child
    What's the point of even trying?

    She can withstand the monster's might
    Even though she's never smiled
    Silver tears are forever falling

    Touching everything in sight
    Everyone has become beguiled
    What's the point of even trying?

    Alone in the middle of the night
    Her life will always be defiled
    Silver tears are forever falling

    Wandering down like a kite
    The feelings that she feels aren't mild
    What's the point of even trying?

    She's going to give up without a fight
    She'll never do a thing that's wild
    What's the point of even trying?
    Silver tears are forever falling

  • ShadowDancer
    18 years ago

    dark to me now

    No more do the stars brightly glimmer
    Happiness in my life I will no more allow
    No more do streams under moonlight glitter
    No more to me does the wide sea shimmer
    To me the sun itself is dimmer
    For all is dark to me now

    Since the day the life flew out of thee
    Only weeks after we had made our vow
    All thoughts of life deserted me
    Life itself lost all meaning to me
    The joys in this world I no longer can see
    For all is dark to me now

    Each day as I sorrowfully waken
    Wishing I was with you somehow
    For by God you have been taken
    I am left desolate, alone and forsaken
    My faith has been so surely shaken
    For all is dark to me now

    Now my body lies broken
    Forever is it dark for me now
    For my heart it has been broken
    For my soul it has been broken
    So desperate steps I have taken
    With you forever I will be now

  • Tisha
    18 years ago

    I know your there but I can't see you
    But it feels like you are beside me in everything that I do

    I know your there but I can not hear your voice
    I'd be right there with you if given the choice

    I know your there but I can not hold you
    I would have spent every second with you , if I had only knew

    I know your there but I can not feel your touch
    I would love to hold you and let you know that I miss you so much

    I know you are there because the thought of you is always in my head
    In my heart you will never be dead

    I know you are there but for now we have to be apart
    Someday we will be together again,But until then I will love you forever in my heart

    Copyright ©2005 Tisha

    * Sometimes in our lives when the people we love leaves us,we can still feel them here with us,And someday we will all be together again*

  • Nee
    18 years ago

    My Final Plea!

    This night skies are full of shooting stars that pass by
    each shooting star is a memory for me to cry

    how do I smile when I remember our goodbye moment
    when fate separated us though we were really meant

    I remember when we used to sit and together watch the twilight
    But today I watched it all alone, without you, my glittering light

    I remember hearing your sweet voice singing me our song
    whispering in my ears " Babe Only to you I know I belong"

    I remember how I used to hold your hand and snuggle
    now I tend only one second touch to end all my struggles

    I miss your soft touch, and the gentleness of your smile
    without you, I feel like a stranger living in an exile

    till when do I have to stand the idea of our separate
    or I should just forget that we'll ever be soul mates

    oh how I wish you'd come back and warm me up when I'm cold
    but if fate separated us forever, Know our love I'll always hold

    right now I'm waiting for you to kill the nothingness inside me
    And I guess this is the last line..So I guess this is my final plea

  • Kaylee
    18 years ago

    Intervention Divine

    Walking; clicking;
    Stones drifting between the ocean waves.
    Splashing the shore with water yet drowning my sorrows.

    Speaking; knees weakening;

    Remembering our final kiss.
    Touch of your lips; heat of your breath on my delicate cheek.

    Haunting; smiling;
    Image frozen in my mind.
    Screaming; calling; Your voice dying in my dreams.

    Seagulls talking in their native tongue; mocking me.
    Ocean swallowing the spirit you captured.
    Lost before your time.

    Shining; glistening;
    Golden ring sitting in the center of my hand.
    Bitter metal reflecting the coldness piercing this torn heart.

    River; ocean;
    I'll cry until these tears flood
    the water systems of the world.
    Grand canyon would not be deep enough to hold my hurt.

    Missing; listening;
    Replaying that tape of memories stored. My thoughts.
    Hoping; Needing; desperately praying the gates of Heaven are open.

    Breathing; Sleeping;
    Yet even still he steals
    the curved angel wings from your back.
    Ignore him, though, for he will never take your place.

    My love rests with you...

    but commands me to allow a
    new blossom of joy to fill my
    waking hours.

    And to accept this new angel in my life.

  • Tisha
    18 years ago

    Thank you for your opinion."I know" I could have used my imagination more Bob,but thats how it came to me.Glad you took time to read my poem.
    Tisha~

  • sarah
    18 years ago

    1st Bob shank

    2nd tisha

    3rd pure heart

    all poems were really good,was a really hard choice.

  • PURE HEART
    18 years ago

    thank u so much Sarah! it means a lot to me. all wer great....... especially Bob was fabulous. nice job Bob! and Tisha u too did a nice job.
    congrats to all!

  • sarah
    18 years ago

    Don't worry I already do that, I always rate and comment on
    all new poem especially the one's that have no votes or comments on them yet.

  • Tisha
    18 years ago

    Awwww, Thank you so much !!! I just went through some of your poems Sarah and you are a awesome writer. Congradulations to you Bob and Pure Heart.I can see where it would be hard to choose which one is the best when there is so many great writers on this site.Thanks Again!
    Tisha~