Who wants Criticism?

If anyone who has already posted in this thread want to contact me, Private message me.

RoadandtheRadio, you PM me if you continue the prose.

JHarrison, if you explain that Conflagration.. please PM me.

Same Concept Repeated Again

Leave two titles of yours here and I WILL comment and vote on them. I will go through other poems and your profile if I think I need to know more in order to comment.

But be ready for Ctiticism. I wont leave a comment with "Nice poem" or a "Good one". And don't think I will give 5 for every poem I read, but I will not vote if I want to vote below 4.I will vote if I want to vote 4. (You should be thanking Goran for this. He is the one who convinced me to not vote below 4.)

I will look at the concept, thought process, vision, flow, rhyming, words used and punctuation at the minimum.

Do not leave Haikus or Tetracysts here, I do not have the knowledge to analyze and rate short poems.

Only first three members to reply will have their poems commented upon.

I tell you once again, be ready for Criticisms. I do really write long comments.

Acia,

I have commented on "Wounded" and "Without". Please make exclusive use of punctuation. Taht is my standing suggestion to you.

You recently commented one of my poems, and you honestly criticised it. I appreciate that, as i really do want to become better. Could you please do these two:

Bleeding Mascara
Crimson Rose

Thank you very much.

the fairer one
night

thanx

JHarrison,

Your poems are done.

Man, you have a vocabulary of a clergy and you seem a very complex person. I hope people just get along with you. Or do you have a boundary enclosing your deepest relations exposing your true self to only them??

Could you comment on my title "My Languid Loneliness" , if you do not mind.

Tammie,

Your poems are done. Thank you for giving me a chance again after going through my bawdy comments once before.

Could you read through my title "My Languid Loneliness" and "Victim"; if you have the time, that is.

Can I ask again? =P

If so, could you look at my newest one please.. It has a low rating and I would kind of like to know why.. =/

Thankss if you will, but if not don't worry! =]

my latest one... your Criticism, i very appreciated!

thank you.

Hey dhaval,

Nice to meet a fellow Indian. Keep in touch.
I have commented on your poems. You are good.

Could you comment on my titles "My Languid Loneliness" and "Victim"??

He He ; -].

Of course you can ask again Jess, but I will do it for a deal. Tell me how to put those hearts and other special charaters in your disply name and you comment on my poem "Life".

I am askign you coz, you really did write atleast something in the comments for "My Languid Loneliness".

I liked your comments so I want to ask you a favor. I forgot to comment on your poem but I will along with one or two more *I did look some over just forgot to comment* but I want to know if you could read a short scene I wrote for a story.

I'm writing a story about a high functioning autistic teenager. The scene I wrote is just a random scene for now I might or might not use when I actually start writing it out. I just want to know if it sounds realistic at all please.

It's called Safe Haven

Lol, okies! =]

To get the hearts and stuff you just copy and paste them into your name. You can get them from websites or sometimes from "symbols" in microsoft word.. [Not sure if that works though.. =P]

And, I'm off to do your poem now! =]

Put these together

& hearts ; will equal ♥

Jessy,

I managed to atleast write something for your poem.

^^ Really? =O Thats so cool! Lol.. =P

Oh and thankss! =]] I'm done with your poem too! ♥

Shadowspoet and RoadandtheRadio,

You will have to wait for 20 minutes. I have some urgent configuration to finish.

Shadowspoet,

Your poem is done. Do you really have trouble with English or you just write in boards and comments that way to stress a personality that you want others to see??

Your language in the poem was ok.

Yours is done too RoadandtheRadio. Thanks for that info about getting hearts in place.

To all in this thread,

If you felt that my comments were useful, please praise the comment. You can do this by clicking the Prasie link just below my comment of your poem. This will help my awards and in turn help me start a club for Criticism.

I'm reading through your comment and thought I'd point some things out lol

It's a short random scene for a story not an artical.
The chracter is autistic (If you've ever read The Curious (sp) Incident Of The Dog In THe Night Time) and there fore can't understand much emotions whether it be her own or anybody else's. There for it was hard to give her a voice :) I only mentioned the disorder name to give people a heads up but thanks so much for the suggestions. I did like them and I hope you give more to people!

Oh and your welcome about the heart info ♥

Well maybe you are right Road and the Radio; but then if she can think of all those complex feelings that you have written about and able to remember her mother in such a detail, she should be able to have a personality; need not be a complex personality.

But yes I agree, in the beginning stanzas I had no idea that the girl would be the one who is autistic...

Yet.. I do not ahve personal experience but I have read about personality disorders much and I really do thik that austistic people are quite capable of having a personality.

My humble surrender if I am wrong. Just my thoughts.

Did I say that you were wrong? If I did then I am sorry. I said I did like your comments and your suggestions. I WILL porbably end up using them. I think you give great comments.

Just want to say thanks for the criticism.
Appreciated it alot.
k.k.

Mistress,

No Problemo. I see that you have considered my suggestions. You indeed have changed some punctuations.

I did not mean it in such a fashion Road and the Radio. Well forget it, we are just trying to tell each otehr that the other is better and this is gonna go on if we don't stop.

So well; Thanks for your appreciation. And after all this, you must definitely PM me if you continue the Prose.

dumpstead,
I would really like some input on my poems "As long as I have you" & "Unwanted", in return I will comment on yours... even though I dont think I'm really qualified to critisize!
Thanks!

what is this that i see every where???
where ever I go i see same thing written by you

Desigirl,

I understand your concern and viewpoint.

Well, as I have said. I follow a process. I rate the poem based on concept, Vision(imagination), flow, expression of feeling, language(pucntuation, rhyming, etcc...). Every poem has these characteristics and I just rate them individually to myself and point out what according to each could have been better. That is all I do and anyone looking through these viewpoints can do the same.

That is the reason I have not commented on every poem I read. I open a thread and ask for titles and whoever gives it, I go thorugh their poems based on the above things. If I have repeated some words like Punctuation and Vocabulary and Phrasing, it is because they are what most people need to work on.

Maybe you are reading too many of the poems I have commented upon, but when I comment I address it only to that particular author so yes some things might have been repeated. Apart from that if you are thinking that you have seen the exact words like "vision", "flow" again and again, it's beacuse it's a part of teh process I use; well just think how many times you have come across the word "poem" until now... and every poem does has "title" and it does have the flows, visions,... and other things I mentioned whether the author recognizes it or not.

If you follow a different process and would like to share it, I am always open for knowledge.

Goth,

Sorry man; You will have to wait. I am leaving the town in a couple of hours on a long jingaling holiday. I will be back by 25th. Remind me once then and I will definitely do it.

I would like to say thanks for your honest criticism. It can be hard to read, but it helps to make me a better writer, so thank you for that. I take in consideration all that you point out. I just would like to ask what punctuation I need to work on. I thought that I put in all the apostrophy's (sp?) when needed etc. I'm not saying i have perfect punctuation, I'm just curious as to what i have to improve in that area exactly. Thanks for your time, have fun on your holiday.

Tammie,

Private Message so that I can add you in my contact list. Once I am back from my holidays, perhaps we can pick one of your poem and go thorugh it together and see about punctuation and other things.

What do you say? Gonna be fun, eh?

Alright i'll PM you. I'm not looking forward to this though. I will get ripped to shreads. Eeek!

I thought this thread would die soon, but it refuses to. I had written the following in a new thread since I had closed this thread, but since it is still moving, I have pasted the contents here.

To everyone who has responded to my Criticism threads,

I Thank you one and all for making it such a wonderful experience for me. You have been most considerate in letting me thump your spirits and inspite of it you have smiled at me. When I started to give harsh comments, it was an awful experience for me as I recieved many hate replys and such things even when the author himself had asked for comments to be left. But I must thank those who had been throwing tantrums at me too, because thay have taught me how to handle such situations.

I had a most enthralling time going through the works you people wanted me to and a fun time in getting to know all you people. I would like to continue to be in touch with you all.

I must say that I am richer by the experience.

And all of you out there; if you think you need a friend who will always keep your feet firmly on the ground no matter how hot headed you are or whether you dream of floating with the clouds, Private Message me or mail me at Adarsh.Vijayakumar@gmail.com.

I will be out of town for approximately 10 days, I hope to come back and start another thread. In the meantime please feel free to go through any of my works and please feel free to write all the nasty and bawdy things you wanted to say to my face when I ripped apart your poems.

Yours friendly,
Dumpstead.

Dumpstead,

Thanks for leave your nice comment.

"Do i really have trouble with English..." i don't know, perhaps.... and do you ever read nor write poem "free verse", perhaps you never...by the way, thanks once again for your great Criticism! i really appreciated!

have a great day!

Bert ~

Could You please do these two...

As I Am
and...
It Only Hurts When I Breathe

If you would be so kind, rip them apart. I can take it in which it was meant.

Thanks
Jeannie

Can you please do...

- A liar to desire
- Raise the blind

*I would really like to hear what you think feel free to get the nitty gritty with it... Thanx.

Karms.

Twisted Heart,

Your poems are done. Thanks for your comments on my poems. I know that you will not mind my interference, especially after I read your comment on my work "Born to be Wild".

Please keep in touch, I really must say that you are the fisrt actual critic that I have met in this site. I do not want to loose contat with you.

Goth and Karma Hope,

I just got back and you will have to wait for one more day for me to go thorugh your poems as I am attending to pending issues during my absence.

I will try to finsih them within tomorrow EOD.

Sorry for the dealy.

If the offer is still open I'd love to read your appraisal of Autumnal Joy and Subtleties in Latitude.

They are both very different and should make for interesting reading.