Who wants Criticism?

Road and teh Radio,

I will when your turn comes int he list, so please be patient.

I'm patient don't worry lol

If i asked really nicely could you do my two latest? please??

All comments are always returned, but be warned if you are brutel to me, yes i will repay the favour!!

HA HA! Esther,

I AM brutal on everyone. That is why my thread is so long and so are my comments. Read the topic of the thread and understand it and then let me know whether you still want me to comment on your poems.

You can break down any of my poems even without waiting for me to pick yours apart. I would actually appreciate the effort.

Dumpstead

no problem, just wanted to make sure you got it.

Thanks
Jeannie

Isn't my turn yet? lol I'm starting to get nervous.

Wow, very nice offer!

would you plz do
-tortured mind

thanks a bunch

~Murder.

Could you please do
*The Inner Monster

Thank you
xx

Hello, I would appreciate some feedback on my very first poem.
"You"
Thank you :)

Ok i think youve done two of mines but can you please please do 2 more for me?
There called:
- Snow Children
- Let Death Take You.
Thanks! xx

Make me cry with your words of wisdom. :]
My friend LOVES this poem, but I hate it...
*Icecream Love

And this:
*Let's Do The Atom Bomb Dance

EvilAngel,

Your poems are done. Pay more attention to vocabulary and to describing your visions more accurately.

Can you comment on my works "My Languid Loneliness" and "Victim"

EvilAngel,

Your poems are done. Pay more attention to vocabulary and to describing your visions more accurately.

Can you comment on my works "My Languid Loneliness" and "Victim" ??

hi,
can you comment on my last poem there s a created distence between us, i will apriciate it

Letty,

Your poem is done. Can yoou commment on my work "I can live".

Hi can you please do...

If you were...

The feeling of a tender affection

Thank you, Joe

Could you please do:

`A Tear Stained Body [Senryu]
`Tiny Dancers [Haiku]

Thankss, xx.

dear mr/ms dumpstead,

please do comment on my 2 poems

stay
to the siren who captured me

thank you very much

nacholibre

if you don't mind, i loved your comments and i was wondering if you could comment on: The Dove of Freedom and Blue Colors. Thanx!

xxEvilAngelxx

could u comment on my newest poem? i really need some honest critic.

could you comment on these 2 for me

Is This Love
and
It Seems I Broke His Heart

thx a bunch

Thank you Dumpstead! Your comment was greatly appreciated. I also have commented on the poem of your request and I didn't leave a one liner. lol. If you have any time could you please comment on my poems:

Little twelve year old Lisa
The winter fairies.

Thank you!

If you have anymore that you would like me to read and comment on please leave them and I will get to them as soon as possible.

Best wishes
Letty

Ho!

I am getting flooded with requests. !!! But that's a nice thing.

I will do every poem on this thread, but only with time. Please be patient. It might take me more than 15 days to complete everyone on this thread, until now.

Goran will have a quick response from me in a matter of 2 or 3 days because I owe it to him and he has a score to settle against me.

Twisted Heart,

Your poem is done.

Would you Please care to rip apart my poem "Warrior". It's the second poem I ever wrote and will have lot of scope for improvement as all my poems do.

Jessy,

I have done your poem "Slowly Fading Away".

Could you please comment on my poem "Warrior".

Reiko,

Your poem is done.

Could you comment on my poem "My Languid Loneliness" ??

RoadandtheRadio,

Your poem is done. What happened to that prose you were trying??

Also, can you comment on my work "Warriror" ??

Okay, I did "Warrior" Hope it doesn't ruin our fresh friendship. But, hey, you asked.

Friends
Jeannie

Twisted Heart,

Thanks for your time and comment on my poem. I must say they were very justifiable.

Yes, I am a bit happy now. and why would it ruin our friendship?? As you know, I asked for it.

Reiko,

Thanks to you too for your honest comment. Yes, that is a bawdy piece of work written in rage rather than in pain, so yes, it lacks a lot of expression.

I think you should revisit that poem and try to make it sound as if you have rage building inside you. It can be a lot better.

hey if i could still get you to critisize a few, that would be great!
1. unforgettable
2. the story behind her smile

either of those two or 'memories' ...take your pick!

Museum,

Your poems are done. The concept of both of your poems was wonderful and rare. Just pay more attention to express what you exactly want the reader to feel.

Can you comment on my works "My Languid Loneliness" and "Warrior" ??

Murder,

Your poem is done. And glad to meet a Rhymer finally on the Thread.

Could you comment on my poem "My Languid Loneliness" or "Warrior", if you don't mind?

Abby,

I would not dare call myself a Guru, but I do speak my mind and most seem to like it . I also have made quite a few negative impressions, but well that's for the good in the long run.

To All,

I have been quite busy last week and I expect to be much more busy at work this week. So I have not really been able to go through a lot of poems but as I have said before, I will complete every poem on this thread; but only with time. I still have a long list to come to the end of this thread.

Thanks for all your patience and inputs,
My heartfelt aplogies to have to keep you in waiting still,

Regards,
Dumpstead.

"A Letter From Your Soul"
and
"Why Don't You Have A Heart?"

Please and thanksya muches in advance.

~BJ~