One for Two .

`Loving You

My newest poem . No one liners -- If you do so, expect the same in return . Honest opinions . Leave titles -- I don`t like poking around for which poems to do .

Thank you(=
..__MiNDYY

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NOTICE: Please be warned that I am unable to leave comments on poems in the categories: Friendship and Love. I apologize for this inconvenience, but the site logs me out when I click on these poems. I will leave my comments directly in the discussion board if this problem occurs.

I'll check it out! Please read
"Fairytale Love..."
"Death Writting Horror..."
Their my only 2 poems on the site lol. Thank you very much!

Edit: Here is my comment lol.

On the 1st part where it says
"Yet it's something I come love."
I think you meant
"Yet it's something I have come to love."
And on this part
"When I'm wirh you, I can't deny,"
You should probably fix the "with"
Other than these few misspelled things it was a good poem! I felt like you kind of forced a few parts to rhyme instead of just letting it flow like

"Loving you is a necessity,
It's like the air that I breathe.
Falling into your eyes,
My whole world comes to freeze."

The freeze part kind of throws the rhythm of the poem off unless its supposed to be “comes to a freeze” in that case its fine. Other than that I really enjoyed the poem, it had emotion flowing out all over which is really good. You’ve got talent, so don’t let those small mistakes take away any power from your poems, cause they are good.

All opinions in this comment are my opinions, you can choose to use them or forget them as you wish.

DONE

-Ride of History
-Reminiscence

Sorry . I wasn`t on yesturday after I posted the post XD I`ll get these done by the end of today .

i commented your poem..could you please comment these 2:

*passing away the pain
and
*she ended her life

thanx