Working on a title still

by ღtheღcrunkღpirateღ

His lonely eyes only see things
in shades of blue grey
as he watches the world go by
murky bruises cover his pitted skin
he observes quietly from afar
until he is chased away by another
in an endless game of tag
with a his battered ego
he succumbs to another defeat
a timeless loneliness
is suffered from a distance
by the man in the moon

-i can't think of a title... any ideas would be appreciated-

 

Submission date : 2006-01-15

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The Wingless ( F P C D ) at 2006-02-03

I really like this poem, the words are so strong, I can't really think of a title to tell you, and I don't really have anything to say, this was a great poem, that I really enjoyed, I just wish it could be longer. Thank you for sharing this poem. Please keep up the good work.

The Wingless ( F P C D ) at 2006-02-03

I don't know, I'm weird...maybe Soldier of the Stardust

or

Farawy Dawn.

The Wingless ( F P C D ) at 2006-02-03

*Faraway

Tyler Windish ( F P C D ) at 2006-02-04

Very good..i like the way you chose your words

Michele DeLuca at 2006-05-02

Impressive..totally unique concept I really like it. Awesome job keep up the good work



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