by Rachel RTVW
Submission date : 2008-06-24
Karl Wild AKA GodsGift ( F P C D )
I love nature poems, but it's not often I find one I actually enjoy. This one on the other hand was amazing, such a deep meaning and the words were very powerful. Mother nature will always be there...excellent job 5/5
[ Praised by Rachel RTVW | Approved by PnQ Mod Account ]
Leap Of Faith aka Temps ( F P C D )
"From my room with a view I see
Sapphire waves of coming tide
Wispy clouds floating by
As day will soon subside"
`I loved how you started it out like you were actually looking out a window, because it puts the reader in your exact position and it makes me picture this so perfectly. This description was amazing. I couldn't have worded it better than you did. The words that you used to describe this view was amazing. So vivid!
Overall, such a beautiful write. One that you could picture so vividly, and when you look at the picture it's exactly what I imagined in my mind. Wonderfully written. This poem was amazing, you definatly have your way with words! 5/5
[ Praised by Rachel RTVW | Approved by Sherry Lynn ]
*little miss sunshine*
I find my poems lack description
which is why i particually admire this one
it really painted a picture with words
made me feel relaxed
Mr Darcy I Delete I ( F P C D )
Poetry is great and springs up from the most unlikely places, imagery for instance. A picture paints a thousand words, but best of all when they are crafted such as yours here.
I love the sapphire reference and the passage of time, form sunset to moon rise, possibly a reference to the enduring love given freely by a mother.
Great piece :)
Robert Gardiner ( F P C D )
Resplendent Write, Wonderful Rachel!!!