Black water

by StandStill   Mar 11, 2008

A girl
on a cliff
so monotone
her life
so plain and bland
a never ending cycle
like the waves below the cliff
and lapping
rising to meet her
she wants to meet the water
the inky black
the cold
to thrash
for a moment
then let the cold overtake her
to end it
to close her eyes
and just let go
but not today
she throws a rose
red as her blood
blood not spilled
a tribute to her life
her lack of courage
to do the impossible
to fly off the cliff
to meet the inky black waves
she'll be back again
but for now
a blood red rose floats away on black water


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  • 10 years ago

    by Lauren Crandall

    I liked the bluntness of this poem, which is very odd considering normally i hate short adjectives and such.
    in this case however i really loved the choppy nature that followed the story.

    However, i thought the story could have had more depth; as it was slightly boring, and didn't have enough emotion as i would have liked.


  • 10 years ago

    by Wereallbladesarntwe

    "A blood red rose floats away on black water?" a beautiful image, i love that, well done mate, x P

  • 10 years ago

    by Alvaro

    I have to say i love your poems your flow.. is... just.. peaceful.. gentle.. as if im lookin at waves.. in my head.. literally speechless =] loved it 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by LoveBird99

    Wow! I love the imagery, and I can really relate to the depression ans darkness described

  • 10 years ago

    by Niels can I possibly write a comment right now when I'm still shocked by one of the best poems I've ever seen!

    This poem is full of tension and so dark that I could see it in my head, like pictures!!

    Awesome job! Keep writing!!

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