I think that at times you over-did it with the decriptions, there were too many adjectives in certain places.

'and fireflies dance
above their little heads
Dancing upon the wind
like the fairies do,
little ladies
of the light.'
`The whole idea of something dancing on top of something else, is so cliche these days. I think people are completely blinded by the fact that that thought is used SO often on this site. I would think of something more original if I were you.

Good imagery in this piece however, but the two things I mentioned I think could be worked on.

It is full of images and nice ones. It is whimsical and easy to read, no profound message to try and figure out. Just a good easy to understand poem. Well done.

I loved it, it's so easy to read and understand. i love the imagery i felt i was there with the way you painted the poem.
you're an amazing writer, can't wait for more. <3 Katiekins

Yet another beautiful piece Ingrid, this one was filled with much magic oozing out of every line. You should really be proud of this piece, it was breathtaking as all of your poems are. Keep up the great work, have a great day!

God Bless You!

~MaryAnne

That was amazing,

"upon the nightly breeze
surrounded by this
kaleidoscope of colors,
leaving behind a trail
of silvery sparkling fairy dust"

- A wonderful poem. Very upbeat; you could feel the magic waiting to burst!

Well... I liked the depiction and imagery it creates and that's really made it a good write. Very enjoyable!

I have heard it said many times about a poem being over descriptive "How can that be when the words are from the writer what they feel or see at the moment.?" Each of us express ourselves differently.

A poet pours out his or her heart in words. The imagination floods our minds. This poem was peace and beauty.

I loved it
as i read it i could picture the faries flying around
what a beautiful poem
i really enjoyed it
(:
5/5

Your words are enough to show the reader
the beautiful view you saw. It just takes the
reader into the arms of nature..a lovely
read :)

This is just as beautiful as all your wonderful writes.
Definitely an enjoyable read.
Keep up the good work Ingrid.
Paul...

OMG! This poem is so alluring and elegant. It gets one into a dreamy mood, in a paradise-like ambience. Emanates a serene calmness as one reads along. There's this animative movie-like scenario in this piece. How you described the fiaries dancing in the breeze as well as fireflies in the wind. Very vivid as if one is watching the colourful events unfold in the screen.

Very beautifully described with carefully selected words that creats such a magnificent piece. I can also imagine looking at an exquisitely painted portrait, with you sitted on the bed birthing the whole detailed art work. It can also be a paint. I really loved what you created here.

My forte is penning nature poems and I salute your perfection. Am glad I read this and I learnt a lot and I'll keep learning. Its an ace. *claps* :-)

Splendid!!!