Comments : Frozen Sunset.

  • 7 years ago

    by Jad

    Very nice imagery in this poem. I love reading your poetry. Always an eye opener for me. It all flowed very well and I didn't see anything that needed correcting. Good job and keep writing.

  • 7 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I just was looking at my favorite authors and noticed you had a new one! This by far had to be one of the most cherished poems from your latest list. The usage of such enchanting words like "whimsical eyes" and "spellbound" just connected your poetic heart and lovely meanings from your heart. I absolutely adored this and will have to read it over and over again. The question on the end, "What's not more to love?" suggested that although this poem has ended, your thoughts of him haven't, and every word exhaled with be a valuable treasure.

    Splendid read, thanks for sharing.

    ~MaryAnne

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Temps
    What a wonderful piece. Your feelings of love are felt throughout the entire poem. Awesome imagery and word choices.
    Excellent job!
    Love Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by The Princess

    A rather enjoyable read from you. I would move the second line ''a frozen sunset;'' though to the 8th line. before ''casted upon waters''.

    loved the ''valued at a thousand words'' line. as in a picture is worth a thousand words. creative.

    ''from honeydew to misty blue''

    loved how that sounded. and the image of it. well done. and write on.

  • 7 years ago

    by Faithless

    I love how you open up the poem. It just makes me want to read more.

    honeydew to misty blue
    ^^^
    Great description here, I like that you use 'honeydew' instead of the normal green. It's also nice that you used misty the describe the blue, as it gives the reader a mysterious feeling to the imaginary that you have painted.

    a piece of authentic worth-
    to never be exchanged
    but with a replica of you;
    a soul of adversity.

    ^^^
    This piece just seems to get better and better. I like how you phrase this using the 'authentic' and 'replica' to express something that you long to own but can only get something of similar resemblance.

    What's not more to love?
    ^^^
    You totally nail it to the end with this one. What a great way to end this poem.

    Excellent Job

  • 7 years ago

    by BreakEven

    Wow. this is amazing. your words are so picturesque! love it 5/5/

  • 7 years ago

    by Cindy

    Congrats on your win Temps :)
    I told you it was a winner
    Love Cindy

  • 7 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow. I loved this poem from the title and beginning! You write about the nicest kind of love, that only people who have shared this experience could understand. It gave me such a warm feeling inside and made me appreciate love more! I love how you describe a perfect love as a frozen sunset. If only we could really freeze such a beautiful romantic moment so nothing bad could ruin it! Beautiful poem! And congratulations on a well-deserved win!

  • 6 years ago

    by H. Elizabeth

    Beautiful and amazing. I love it =D

    keep up the amazing work =)

  • 6 years ago

    by Rania Moallem

    Spellbound am I by you--
    a frozen sunset;
    >> Truly amazing Jace, i love that 1st word a lot.. the whole expression is too meaningful..

    yet fascinated
    of whimsical eyes from
    honeydew to misty blue-
    ^^I can't believe how strong these lines are.
    Perfect description!

    transforming elegance
    into a mural of your heart,
    casted upon waters
    valued at a thousand words.
    ^^Temps this is just purely perfect.
    Word choice is no bet unique. worded in a very special way. Very creative and very special.
    I am in love with each single line..

    Each syllable a prized possession,
    a piece of authentic worth-
    to never be exchanged
    but with a replica of you;
    a soul of adversity.
    ^^^U have no idea how strong this stanza is.
    COherent meaningful and flowless!
    Your images are very unique in this poem..so much admiration and a lot of original-poetic lines.
    -I admired this piece!
    BADLY ashamed that I have not read it b4!

    5/5

  • 4 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    I love sunsets so the title really caught my eye and pulled me into the poem. I thought how can a sunset be frozen haha

    We are all spell bound by sunsets as they are heart warming and beautiful to look at. They give us joy and tranquility feelings inside. Butt I love how you comparethe sunset to your love unique as I have never seen that before. Truly rremarkable wording here. I have never truly thought of eyes as whimsical. Though they are because they can dance and play with the feelings of your soul. The imagery you describe is immaculate. Misty blue eyes that dance with yours. I

    I love the painting a mural in your heart wow. We can all speak something with our eyes without speaking a single thing. The waters of your eyes are lovely because if you look deep enough you truly can swim inthem and they say words without speaking a single one again wow.

    Everytime you look into a person's heart it truly is to beamazed. I truly feel the love you portray just from blue eyes. Each moment with your true love should and can never be replaced. Each person is unique in their own way just like a sunset. It is a great moment in time that everyone has come to love and will fall for someday. Beautiful 5